I watch you look through me,
secrets never told drifting away on a breeze going nowhere.
Seeing her tear your heart out with her acrylic nails,
hoping for a chance to put it back together and yet I’m nothing more than a door blocking your view.
Secretly breaking down in face of your impassive countenance.
I bleed my inability to cope on my pillowcase.
As rivulets of regrets fall down my face, my mind whirls around untold dreams.
Imaging your touch is a double edged sword.
Feeling your invisible hands glide over me, I open my eyes to you holding her gently.
Breath constricts as my unknown dream clings stubbornly to unfounded hope.
Your perfect lips form words of indifferent concern, as I ghost my plea to only hear it drowned out by your lover’s voice.
Oh love of mine I breath you in quietly to sustain my sanity of dreams and unknown feelings,
and as you catch me staring a charming smile takes over as I fall all over again.
My emotion I will never tell, even as my heart tears a little more each time you press your lips to hers.
Almost perfect love of mine, how I fantasize of you returning what is mine.
Clasping my hand in more than well-mannered decorum.
Looking into your eyes sways me to the hypnotizing rhythm of your spoken word.
And I know you can do wrong, but it never seems to matter.
Gliding across the hallway with your haughty stride, you leave me breathless.
Even if it leads you away from me.
In my nighttime view, I encircle you in my embrace.
I take comfort in the fact that it is only a dream.
Knowing you’ve yet to reject me.
Continuing on as if nothing is amiss, gazing at your reflection through semi-rose covered glasses,
I secretly love you, if only in my dreams.
Author notes
By ReignOnMe
A contest entry
- Invite Only Contest [For Nighttime Angel's Favorites Only] by Nighttime angel.
1410 points, ended March 29, 2008, 68 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Emotion by Sharitti.
900 points, ended March 5, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Comments
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Wow, great emotions in this peice. Your imagery in this is great. I especially liked the "acrylic nails" part. Great job on this and good luck in the contest.
Josh
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Wow, fantastic job on this piece!
Marvelous imagery. I love the sad, heart-wrenching tale you've told here.
Bravo!!!
♥ Kate
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Wow!! Your imagery is unbelievably so beautifully written. This is an amazing piece of art. Thank you for entering
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Excellently penned.
Ah, this piece of very good...I can honestly say that my breath was taken away. Such description...I haven't seen its likes for quite some time. The title was accurately made...my favourite line being, "Oh love of mine I breath you in quietly to sustain my sanity of dreams and unknown feelings" Simply...astounding. One can imagine each of the pictures you've drawn. Your poem is truly art, ascending far past many other works. Emotion well put, sparingly penned. In other words, one of the closest works I've seen to being a perfectly heart wrenching tale. So in summary, though the mood was depressing it raised my spirits by the sheer skill. Thank you for writing this beauty.
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Seeing her tear your heart out with her acrylic nails,
hoping for a chance to put it back together and yet I’m nothing more than a door blocking your view.
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i thought that was realy good
i have nothing bd to say bout you rpeom it was amazing...
everythig could use improvement but i think you have nothig to worry about -
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im way sorry i made so many mistakes...
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it's ok. it happens to all of us sometimes, lol.
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oy. i wanna be loved like that.
that is amazing. heartbreakingly beautiful. this is an awesome write dear. you have done such a lovely job here.
thank you so much for entering this in my contest. i love this style... i love this write. it truly touches me.
i wish you very best wishes of love and happiness in life.
best wishes and best of luck!
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I really love this poem that you have written. such emotion through out this piece. so much pain, thats what I felt while reading through this. outstanding job with this poem..
thank you for entering & good luck
kat
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wow. I love the description of all you are seeing and feeling. The pain displayed here blew me away. Thanks for entering.
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this is a very emotional write! i enjoyed reading and i really liked how you formatted it! thank you for entering and good luck!
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Thanks for entering!!!!
I've felt this way so many times. Only once did I ever confess my love, and found someone i could have spent my life with. Of course life isn't a fairy tale and thats why this contest is here. Wonderful heartfelt write. Good luck in the contest ^_^ @>}- -
Oh, wow! I love the title. The last stanza is brilliant and really ties together the whole theme. I can relate to the message of this poem a lot too. I love "almost perfect love of mine". I hate it when people think someone is flawless. If they're human, they have flaws. Beautiful poem and good luck in the contest!
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Very nice poem! I enjoyed reading it, and I hope you enjoyed entering my contest. Thank you for much for the entry!
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im not sure when you wrote this but im suprised that you have no comments yet. I was sucked in from the very first word and that raw emotion held me until the very last word. This was beautifully written, very detailed when it came to the dream man...painted a very clear picture and just made me feel as if i was going through this with you. great job here....well done!
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