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As Flowers Fade

 

I woke to find a world in bloom,
I grew, thought feelings could not jade,
matured, to principles assume, -
synapses slowed, eyes dimmed, hair greyed,
parade band silent, spent perfume.
I passed as fast as flowers fade.

Although decayed, or dust-in-tomb,
I trust Man’s lust may be repaid
in kind to meet deservèd doom
to compensate for way mislaid
where there for ethics little room
seems granted, - Nature disobeyed.

When stealth and wealth, climatic gloom,
waves stimulate, through greed displayed,
consumers rash themselves consume,
ignoring signals strong, must wade
while scavenging through viral womb
tale rats for scraps pollution sprayed...  

 

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  • badddgirl
    September 5
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    I passed as fast as flowers fade.

    You sure have an awesome way with words my friend!
    Great job.
  • emi
    July 26

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    "I woke...I grew...matured...I passed as fast as flowers fade." What a true description of life. Reminds me of Psalms 39 and 90 -
    "Lord, make me to know my end,
    And what is the measure of my days,
    That I may know how frail I am.
    Indeed, You have made my days as handbreadths...
    In the morning they are like grass which grows up;
    In the morning it flourishes and grows up;
    In the evening it is cut down and withers...
    We fly away."

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  • smee
    July 25

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    this poem was beautifully done--i really enjoyed it. wonderful choice of language. i'm impressed by the way you presented your thoughts in such a serious manner without being banal. keep up the good work!

  • Shujaat A Rahi
    July 3

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    The poem starts with a positive note:
    "I woke to find a world in bloom"
    but the first stanza ends in a different mood:
    "I passed as fast as flowers fade."
    It could well be the end of the poem.

    The poem flows well and one of the reasons why it should be read is its musical beauty.

    The background in itself has an attraction for me. How relevant is it to the theme of the poem, is quite another thing. Most of the poems on AP do not have a background that might go with the theme.

    Rahi

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  • anonX
    June 28

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    awesoms poem! love the title because it made me want to read the poem, the rhyme becuase it didnt feel forced, the vocabulary because it wasnt boring, and everything else except the background which is kindof annoying... great poem

  • AmyPixiDust
    April 21

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    i really like the details you have used in this poem it says so much in just a few verses this poem is really deep and i love your choice of title for it that draws people in, i know it did me, this shows so much meaning and i love the background you have used also, keep up the great writing, -Amy

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  • JoshXtheXJones
    April 17

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    ...I love it! The rhyming is awesome, the word choice is rousing, this made me sit up and read it slowly, fully attentive...riveting til the end! Amazing!

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  • Secret Love Affair
    April 15

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    beautifully written. So serious yet so serine... The words just flowed onto the screen for you. I really enjoyed this piece and you should keep up the good work

  • beautyofdespair
    April 9
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    i love the poem

    the background is a bit distracting though

  • Rejected Easter Egg gold member
    April 6

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    thank you so much for featuring this so I could be exposed to your work. lovely job. and good luck with everything in the future.

  • cherche -d -ame gold member
    March 30

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    quite sad in so many ways...yet truth spoken. The yearly fresh blooming flowers fade [some on their own-some because we just do not learn to walk softly amongst them] so like us if wounded too many times, we seem to withdraw and stop blooming. Yet optimistic me seems to want to build some hope out of this. Let us enjoy what there is for us at that moment-----and then it is our duty to make sure those that come after us may do the same thing. We do not have to be young or in our prime to do that---on the contrary, it is wisdom and experience in our growing up and hopefully wiser, so that we can have the tools to teach, to teach the future to learn lessons by our mistakes
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    Although decayed, or dust-in-tomb,
    I trust Man’s lust may be repaid
    in kind to meet deservèd doom
    to compensate for way mislaid
    where there for ethics little room
    seems granted, - Nature disobeyed

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    those lines are a guide to how and what we as humans should not be-but have always been. And then of course when all is said and done doom is deserved. On peut choisir une autre vie, une vie qui va apporter des fleurs de la nature et des fleurs du coeur. Moi, je ne me jamais conduit comme le reste du monde [ethics always come first] and those do not have to be taught. They live within us, oui??????

    reenie

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  • me and nothing else
    March 29

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    I like this poem. It is very nice. I like the first stanza. It made me feel happy. It flows very well. I wish you good luck in the contest! But I didn't really get the rest of the poem. Is it about death? Loss?
    Check out my poetry! My name is I-Love-Donegal
    Don't forget to comment!

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  • sassylilpoet gold member
    November 29, 2007

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    Beautiful choice of words, and beautiful background to go with them. So very fast life fades as a flower, maybe the both of them would last much longer if we would take life a little slower and take the time to really "smell the flowers", yet we often get so consumed in the hustle/bustle of greed, money and living, that we fail to see the beauty that surrounds us. Beautiful penning


  • Whoochi gold member
    November 28, 2007

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    Absolutely vicious background to go with your words..I felt as if I were having one of those warm comfy rainy days...thanks for putting it real and simple....keeping me on the onward grateful path....I am blessed by your words...best of luck! Love your style....its so....indivual and YOU!


  • Lily otv
    November 28, 2007

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    We do indeed pass as fast as flowers fade and I find this poem quite sad. It seems we take time for granted and rush through life paying little heed to the consequences of our actions. We disobey nature each day and hope it will cope but we are 'progressing' faster than it can repair the damage we do. Even with that knowledge onwards we race ...


  • Room without doors silver member
    November 28, 2007

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    Outstanding

    I loved the background, water falling down a window pain. The poem is dark but I liked the language you chose and the rhyme was particularly fine with a smooth flow and sernse of sophistication. I liked the first stanza the most , the sense of decay and the image of a flower wilting which all set the mood of the poem. An interesting write that sees through the cheep heroics of consumers and their wayward whims and instant gratification.I liked the depth and the dark language. A well-written poem with a sense of style.


  • ellipsist
    November 27, 2007

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    powerful! very well worded... views clearly expressed and a message poignantly and articulately conveyed!


  • janejainejayne gold member
    November 27, 2007

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    Bravo!

    Your words help keep my heart simple, dear Jonathan.
    My garden is my delight and this time of year I must put it away.

    Meanwhile, friends and neighbors talk of bug repellant, mosquito sprays, bird flu, and killer bees.
    Everything in my world seens to take good and wonderous care of itself. Nearby trees are removed and chemicals are infused into the soil all round me.
    But for the moment cardinals, bluejays, sparrows and doves join the squirrils to my delight, here in my tiny canopied space. I love the tears falling down the page of your poem. Jane


  • Thin White Duke
    November 26, 2007

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    Very well written, but the background is very distracting making it quite hard to really dive deep into the poem...

  • Night Hope gold member
    November 26, 2007

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    "I woke to find a world in bloom,
    I grew, thought feelings could not jade"

    Gorgeous penning, in both form & content. And what a lovely background it is, as well. Wonderfully done, my Friend. Wanda


  • waydownuponjoy
    November 26, 2007

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    The background

    ... for your poem is one of the best I've seen. The thoughts that you've shared seem appropriate for the writing prompt while reflecting off the by-gone years of virility. The last line was the only one that didn't seem to fit the general tone of regret that was established by the sincerity expressed otherwise. joy

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