Shattered Reality
The lies I have lived through with the cries I have heard,
Leave me in a haunted shattered reality.
This world burns and turns to ashes,
I look around and I all see is darkness and fear,
I see light but its fading, leaving me in a shattered reality.
This haunted world is as if god has turned away.
The stories mum say and the lies dad tell.
Young and confused, hurt and shy.
Want him to be as high as I dreamed,
He left me trampled on with lies and blame.
Mum always had her comforting arms out,
Took me in fully as she always had
Then he came the dad I always dreamed
I got jealous of his girls, and started to hate
The life of what was to come of my close family
To see her so happy with another than my dad
Got me so angry even after what dad had done
I hated him for being what my father couldn't or wouldn't
She made me move my whole life for hers
To live with him and then to become a sister
I had girls at school treat me like dirt under a mat
The first year and half was shit and crap
Except this one guy who made it not so bad
This guy was to become one of my closest friends
And his best mate is now my boyfriend of over a year
So my life of horror and demon’s had lightened for awhile
Then our best mate broke his heart over a girl
I started to fall and he and I became closer
He still saying only friends as I had only wanted
With how I was with this one guy must have killed my guy inside
For now I know how it is because he met his closet friend again
He started to fall once again, He lied and tried to stay
But he felt guilt and confusion, so after asking me for life
Tossed me away and caused me strife. After a week or so
He and I tried again but no it still haunts me, all of my life
Now I have been told that I suffer from a depression
Told to talk and open up, after all people walking away
I have started to self harm, been caught and sent to doctors
seems no one really understands who I am
Short story of my life has now been told
Not that I've lived long or hard
But I believe with the love I hold in my heart
Will keep me safe with what ever is to come of my life
So my belief is that all the troubles that are to come
Will be climbed over by me and the hand I hold
Author notes
i used spell check.
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Wow this is a really good poem. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for entering. Keep on penning.
-Jess
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A raw, sad and disturbing poem, though your last few lines indicate a more positive outlook and future.
A very cool poem.
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Sad .
I feel the pain , I can relate to the emotions , the life . This is a saddening poem . The emotions are overwhelming . But as it touches me , I find it to be a very good write . Keep going .
Take Care . -Draiden .
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The poem jumps around a lot. As a poem, it is alright. The emotion is good, but I feel that there is not overall theme. It goes from abandonment to step-dad, to best friend, to boyfriend, then back to best friend.
I love the raw emotion, but I feel that the poem itself is not solid.
Sorry, but it's just not what I'm looking for.
Thanks for entering!
~Memoirs
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what does it matter if it's spelt properly?... your feelings are so raw and emotional... I hope life gets better... look back at your poem it'll really help you deal with your thoughts and why you're so angry... I get the feeling you feel aabit left behind)
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Okay, please go back and edit this poem. I can tell that you did not indeed use spell check because there are many words wrongly spelled in this poem. Please do and then I will get back to you and tell you what I think of your poem.
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wow, this is truly amazing, it tells a story so vividly and it is turned by line to line with such heart struck emotion, it sends me into a whole different place within myself, like a woman looking thru a window and seeing a reflection, but not truly seeing the "reflection". Great job! Thank you, Best of luck.
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you have such a way of words as i could tell by reading you comment. thanx for the feedback
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omg! hunni! this poem is amazing! i can relate to it soo much! its like ur in my mind!! oooh hunnI!
i have been told im suffering from depression too!
if you ever need to talk you can alwys talk to me and i will be sure to listen t every word no matter what it is abou -
Interesting write about your life. This really needs you to run spell check through it. Good luck.
Thanks for your comment. Actually, poetry stanzas (not paragraphs, paragraphs are in prose) can be any length-as I showed with the use of 3, as you show with this freeverse. There's no rule that poetry stanzas have to be of 4 and I don't think that most of them are
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