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Sweet Child

Oh, sweet child, ask me not what love is,
For you are much too young to bear that pain.
Eternal love will grow in the heart,
As my love for you has done so far.
Oh, sweet child, shed not the tears of heartbreak,
Rejoice in youth and innocent bliss,
For those are the children that God creates.

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Haven't written something in ages and that just popped in my mind. Hope you like it!

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  • K-GyaL
    June 11, 2008

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    I enjoyed this piece.
    Love, heartbreak and pain is something many can relate to and the way you answered a curious child was amazing.

  • grannyeri gold member
    April 26, 2008
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    Welcome back to the Poetic Bandits. Liked the thoughts in these lines - we want to protect these children, keep them from harm's way and fro heartbreak, but they have to live their lives and part of that will be experiencing things that are not always happy or pleasant. God gives us all that opportunity to make choices, and oft times we do not make the right or betters ones. We can only hope we learn from our mistakes and are the wiser for it. Good flow and strong message shared here.

  • Frodofan silver member
    April 16, 2008
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    I can't believe I haven't commented on this. Very nice. Sad, but understandable. On the other hand, perhaps the child SHOULD ask you, for though you may not have known it from the receiving side, you will and/or already do with your child now and you certainly know what it is to give it!

    I like the almost olden style of the phrasing.

    Very nice. Hope you're well.


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    March 25, 2008

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    I just wanted to wrap my arms around my daughter and utter these tender words. Beautiful piece. Filled with wonderful emotion and true care. Thank you for sharing. ~Pamela


  • cutiepie gold member
    February 7, 2008

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    This was beautifully spoken. It held the truth. Bravo


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 4, 2008

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    Yes, the sentiments in this poem are well expressed. liked the flow and the message you share in these lines. When one is a child, there should not be bothered with adult things; children these days grow up much too quickly.


  • Sanguinarius gold member
    January 16, 2008

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    Very nicely put. And as for not writting, i have finaly come of a long block myself, glad you have as well, Take care . ~Bret~

  • goalsv
    November 26, 2007

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    Very good, nice job of writting, and very good thought advice for a child. With love comes pain and the little ones will learn soon enough.


  • parntsoftwins
    November 25, 2007
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    I loved it, being a mother, It's one of those things you know you will say to your child someday! Well written and so full of truth! This is my favorite line...
    Oh, sweet child, shed not the tears of heartbreak,
    Rejoice in youth and innocent bliss,
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