Strange it is...
how near imperceptible actions
scream louder
than empty words
emoted by rote.
Shiver then tense
your physiology
has found you out...
yielding we slide
into the inevitable.
Author notes
quickie with prompt: estrangement
A contest entry
- PIF - 10 Poets/10 Lines/1 Hour by poetryality.
525 points, ended November 26, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I had to look up some words here so I could get the just meaning that you are elaborating on. lol. Nicely done.
found you out...
pretending to be.
interesting how we dont know ourselves.
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YOU ROCK! This was fabulously intense! Excellent work and I can't wait to get caught up on more
Keep 'em coming sista! ~Tia
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good
a master in work
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I really like the way that you have played with words to write this one here
and you write that in 1 hour? 
(as I see in the contest)
Damn, I need several days to complete something with half the power as what you got here
great job!
-Leander -
This is an intense work of word-play. Your second stanza is very astute and vividly written. Love where you went with the prompt. Thank you for the entry and I wish you the best.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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