I'm smiling, so I must be happy.
The payments are taken care of,
I have no problems,
my job is perfect
The pain in my stomach is false
as is the pain in my head,
my feet feel light,
but my hands are swift
My husband and I are perfect.
Of course we never fight,
my house is clean,
and my car is great.
Every dream has come true.
I've never felt loss,
my life is great,
peachy...never better.
When you look, that's all you see.
You've never once thought
the reason I'm smiling
is to mask tears...
Author notes
I wrote this a while ago but something seemed missing. I asked ebpoetry ( www.allpoetry.com/ebpoetry )for help on this and he wonderfully gave his input and helped bring it all together.
Please tell me what you think
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What a great poem. It is so very descriptive of what many people are like. On the outside everything is perfect while on the inside, chaos.
Great stuff.
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We all wear masks of some sort, always holding the sunshine up for others to see while we dwell in the dark. I like the way you deal with the different aspects of the mask in each stanza. Appearing outwardly happy, masking signs of stress and/or ill health. The happy loving couple syndrome. All the while slowly withering inside.
Another view of the darkness.
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Wow
I loved the last line and I can totaly relate to this... I may be smiling but on the inside I am bleeding and dieing. The font was a little hard to see... but it was good.
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I really like this one B, I think it's true for alot of people really. love ya.
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I can honestly relate to this.
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Nice collaboration. When one has this facade, people around would just assume that this is how he is all the time. How true. Wonderfully written.
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Nicely put!
Words of wisdom here hon . . . .
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