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Turn You Away

Our love so great
Thought it was fate
But that was not to be
Though you do not agree
It is time to move on
Soon I will be gone
I can not go astray
I must turn you away

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  • Xxpoison.kissesxX silver member
    May 3
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    nice rhyme


  • januaryrain gold member
    December 4, 2007
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    I have to agree that this is sad, very nice rhyming though


  • a means to an end
    November 30, 2007

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    awwww... that's so sad brother. i really liked this a alot... whom would it be about??? i hope ur OK


  • Abby In Chains. silver member
    November 27, 2007

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    this is... so sad. so very very sad.

    and well written. i am not used to seeing anything but free verse from you my friend. but you did this very well.

    ???

    Abby

  • Isiah Gremlocke
    November 26, 2007
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    steve you made a rhyming poem good job!


  • moonbumps silver member
    November 26, 2007

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    Many times this decision has to be faced...a very astute take on something many people have in common...having to turn away-with difficulty.xx


  • poetryality silver member
    November 26, 2007
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    I love the rhyme in this work poet and feel the discontent. Being estranged often causes a numb feeling, with very hurtful edges, much like what you have written here. Thank you for this entry and good luck in the challenge.

    Much Love ♥

    Renee

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