laying back in the hay
playing Russian roulette
one bullet one 38 one me
too many lies boy
broken bones
destroyed dreams
I fought you well
Held my own
as a cowgirl would
I won't run
You won't go
my friends either side
will lead my horse
empty saddle boots down
and throw my ashes
in the wind from South mountain
Our daughter will take Rocket
Prissy and Patch
she has a letter
Tammy will mail when I do not come back
You won cowboy
A contest entry
- ~ SET the BAR ~ Anything Goes~ Possible of 5750 points handed out! by Florida Sunshine.
950 points, ended February 24, 205 entries
Gold trophy winner
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2000 points, ends October 19, 53 entries
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Congrats on the gold! It's not hard to tell just why this one took away that new shinny toy for you
You writing is so impressive, there is no getting around it - I'm going to have to add u as a favorite 
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Excellently written piece!
I love this piece. I really enjoy sad ones that are well written and this is the best that I have read today. I would have been very disappointed had I found that it didn't win the contest.
Congratulations!
Damon
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Heavy
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Congratulations
on a well deserved win. Very good free verse--this coming from a died-in-the-wool rhymer. I was reading this while listening to the sad baritone rambles of Leonard Cohen... twice as impactful. I was going to recommend this to apoeticinjustice but I see he's already read and commented. Your would appreciate his poetry, I think, if you're not acquainted. Well, enough of the ramble, congrats again!
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Wow ~ impactful ~ I totally wasn't expecting this when I clicked the title ~ wow ~ I just got hit from the side ~ how freaking sad ~ .... Crushing blow ~ .... .... DANG it ~ LOL ~ NOOO seriously you got me good ~ word for word ~ impactfully put together ~ ...
Thanks for entering my "Set the bar" contest ~ I really appreciate you sharing your work with me ~ (and I hate suicidal s***) ~ but this ..... .. Dang... I .... I'm speechless ~ It eats you up ~ doesn't it ~ the more I wanna run on ~ with me ~ thanks ~ .... It still sinking in ~ .... ... I wanna say well done ~ but it so freaking real ~ ... I just wanna cry. -
This one is really heavy
At a time like this a person needs to know which way to point the gun so that it does the most good, and prevents the most harm.
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great...!
This tears at the heart my friend... if I was there I'd take that .38 and throw it in a deep lake somewhere... I love this poem!
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wow.. this is great.. very interesting.. this is my first entry about a cowgirl... this makes me think of an abusive relationship.. and someone trying to find a way out.. althoough this doesnt have a very happy ending.. this kind of stuff happens everyday unnoticed.. great emotion and structure.. this is great.. good luck..
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So sad
Often being strong and staying a woman against a man is so much a losing battle but a man who beats a woman was never a man and never will be a man . Unfit for the world in my book and needs to be taken out by the girls family and flawged seviraly for to see their sister their daughter their mother injured in such a way believe me in my family their would be no love lost as they walk him out into the pasture for lesson one and only then make him walk back to town with no clothes . I have no sympathy for any coward that finds enjoyment in beating a woman I would be their worst nightmare
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this has lots of emotion and is very well written thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest, I liked the rhythm of this write and the way it flows with such emotion.
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a very solemn tone and sad story penned here. A moving read that makes one ponder the harshness of life and the difficult decisions one encounters in their lifetime.
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Sad, but I like it!
It expressed very well the feelings of frustration and despair of a love-gone-sour. Thank you for sharing these feelings. I hope it is just a bad memory and that he didn't really win. Obviously, he didn't; you're alive and doing well!.
Good luck in the contest. I really felt your poem; especially the part;
"my friends either side
will lead my horse
empty saddle boots down
and throw my ashes
in the wind from South mountain"
I could really visualize that tragic scene in my mind because you wrote a vivid "picture" of it with your words.
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dangerous game
but you seem to like adventure.. Do not pull the trigger for so much life awaits you. And those poor horses,\. your true love
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