You became, not what I knew:
A faded image
of love lost within the need
to forget how my name
once whispered across your lips.
How you walked in
like a dream and shifted
as a nightmare – I cannot awaken!
I cannot discover a distance great enough…
Or find the path gentle enough to lead me home.
Author notes
Prompt: estrangement
A contest entry
- PIF - 10 Poets/10 Lines/1 Hour by poetryality.
525 points, ended November 26, 2007, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Beautifully crafted, as always. Your words have made quite an impression. Well done and congratulations on the bronze.
~Pamela 
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This is rich! Sad but beautiful! The prompt is throughout this work poet! Often our dreams are imagined, not what we initially assumed. Your poem speaks clearly of estrangement. A very clear picture is drawn here. Excellent! Thank you for this entry and I wish you the best.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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this is so sadly beautiful, the final line, i don't know, i just hear a door closing in my head
well done. best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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Wow!
I'm impressed...
I like this piece very much.
Opposite of my own and has me wondering if I should remove mine
Bravo! Best of luck hun 
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you want more and you know it lol
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