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Have a Safe New Year

Holiday cheer is ushered in,
Another year has passed us by.
Values and love replacing sin,
Each soul thereof wondering why.
It really should be, this way all year
Given the key, unlocking fear.

A simple end to all our fear,
A time to mend what we’ve been in.
Forget the tears that came this year,
Replaced with cheers that wonder by.
Open your heart, I’ll tell you why;
It’s our new start, forget the sin.

Sometimes the pain is caused from sin
And very plain what causes fear
F orget the hurt, I’ll tell you why
Even revert from what you’re in
We’ve seen the joys as they went by
And heard the noise throughout the year

Natural love throughout the year
Even above the pain from sin
Wondering how as time goes by
We can allow our hearts to fear
It’s time to bring true feelings in
And time to sing and question why

Years end this way, I don’t know why
Even today I bless the year
And I give thanks for what I’ve been in
Rest on the banks of forgiven sin
Holidays are, no time for fear
Better by far, to let it pass by

Yet as the past years do slip by
I have shed some tears wondering why
So listen to me and have no fear
My thoughts are of thee all this year
This holiday time be safe from sin
Let spirits climb bring the new year in

Stay safe my friend and by the end of the year
You will know why you’ll be free from sin
Without any fear bring the new year in

 

 

 

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Acrostic rhyming Sestina with internal rhyme.

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  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    January 3, 2008

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    A beautiful message shines through this Sistina. I applaud you for accomplishing internal rhyme, the difficulty of the form itself, and the added cleverness of the acrostic. But I applaud the message of forgiveness and love which conquers sin and fear most of all. Happy New Year!


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    January 3, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry

    A very good acrostic. Nice flow and structure. I like the message you convey with your words and I think it is really an accomplishment to be able to have all the lines work together.

    God Bless and Merry Christmas
    Tammy


  • Ted E Bare gold member
    December 18, 2007

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    Extremely creative as I love acrostics. I just did well to even write a sestina for the first time. Good luck in the contest. Have a very Merry Christmas and Happy New Year.

    Ted E


  • Ithica silver member
    December 13, 2007

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    Hail to the QUEEN!!! You pen is possesed with holiday magic and inspiring creativity!!! You have outdone yourself as only YOU can!!! (ahhh! s o m e d a y... me thinks to me self...)


  • Desire gold member
    November 28, 2007

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    Wow!!

    So darn Creative You are for this reads Beautifully
    Love how You set up Your Acrostic~~
    with the Sestina also internal rhyme
    Oy!!!


    -Can I have Your Autograph now-

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent Sweet One!
    Many blessings to You in the contest
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • penman gold member
    November 28, 2007
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    Excellent

    What a skillful and clever holiday acrostic. Best of luck in the contest.


  • lilangelsnemesis gold member
    November 27, 2007

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    Nice

    You have added everything to this Sestina that could possibly be added. I Like the way you worked the Acrostic into the poem. That's not easy to do with a Sestina. The ryhme worked very well also. You can tell that you are not new to this form.

    Thank - you for your entry

    lilangel'snemesis


  • JohnnyD gold member
    November 26, 2007

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    Amera,

    you can write these so easily as you believe in yourself, another and God as well, and if one does not Have those three lings in life...they're seriously screwed, blued and tattooed. My life ended on an unexpectedly good cheer itself.



    dad


  • Poetic-Theorem gold member
    November 26, 2007

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    Bravo

    Amera

    You are on one hell-of-a-Roll lately
    YOU ROCK!

    I bow to thee thy "Queen of Form"

    As you know I have "tried" to pen a Sestina, which is the one if not the hardest form poetry to pen.
    My Sestina...no applause
    ~~~~Silence~~~~
    Crickets stop chirping
    I heard a pin drop

    Got off the stage

    You have managed not only to penned a brilliant Sestina, but also add an Acrostic with Internal ryhme.
    Holy S***!

    Please sign my autograph book....please!!!!!

    Gotcha photo now
    I heard one can get big BUCKS for celeb pics

    All kidding aside,
    You have created a Masterpiece more than worthy of being published.

    Take care sweetie,
    Much love,

    A dozen roses to the "Queen of Form"
    ~David~




    • Amera gold member
      November 26, 2007
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      What a great comment. You brought a big smile to my face.


  • Cup-a-Joe
    November 26, 2007
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    Amazing

    Have I ever told you how you amaze me? I am now.
    Joe


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    November 25, 2007

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    Outstanding!

    Best of luck in this contest!! "Have a Safe New Year" is another of your winners!!!


  • soulfultia gold member
    November 25, 2007

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    A profound message and girl you know how to do it big! beautifully done, excellent message within. You are a shining light on this sight! Loved the read ~Tia


  • HaleyMary
    November 25, 2007

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    This is beautiful, Sis. Wonderful flow and poetic form. I also like how it's an acrostic and Sestina form. So cool.
    Best of luck to you in the contest.


  • PerVirtuous
    November 25, 2007

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    This has a lot to say... but I think this is the best message of all...

    "Years end this way, I don’t know why
    Even today I bless the year
    And I give thanks for what I’ve been in
    Rest on the banks of forgiven sin
    Holidays are, no time for fear
    Better by far, to let it pass by"

    We all get stressed during the hustle and bustle of the Holidays. We tend to communicate with family more. Often danders get up... conflicts happen... but the season should be a season of forgiveness and joy. To let these things pass by is the most wise advice.

    As for the poem, wow! A sestina with an internal rhyme and an acrostic, too! Holy Moly! you sure are setting the bar high. You are creating quite a portfolio of brilliant work. Bravo!

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