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her coral voice
rose from silence
raising low tones
of heartfelt
cross stitch words
with frozen tears
and bleeding strings
of violin
to achieve perfection
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Author notes
Written November 25, 2007
A contest entry
- b by grass.
500 points, ended December 3, 2007, 6 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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very expressive & very interesting.
love the use of coral along with describing her, makes this very beautiful. -
congrats to you on the bronze...this is excellent...I love that 'coral voice' and I love the 'cross stitch words' - wonderful metaphor..beautiful poetry, as always...
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lovely. I adore the "coral voice" phrase. This is short, but very, very pretty. Definitly in the prelims list!
I'd prefer, however that you stated
her coral voice
rose from silence
instead of
"her coral voice
rise from silence"
but that's just me. thanks for the stellar entry!
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Excellent images and poem is colourful ("coral voice"), sorrowful ("bleeding strings/of violin") and passionate ("of heartfelt/ cross stitch words"). Good luck in the contest!
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I remember I once (long ago) wrote a poem with the words 'bel canto' in it too. This is beautiful.... loved the lyrical quality of this poem. You are really so very creative and your pen just sings poetry.
~ Nicolette
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