we were
weightless
on the skyline,
26 miles to nowhere.
I want to be a reflection
of the streetlights in your eyes
and
I want to feel my insides
scattered across every
forgotten
suburban
sky
and
I want to pin down your words,
cut them out into wax
and melt them into my skin.
everything you say feels like static
hitting my pores and everything
in the universe
seems
illuminated.
we do not fade,
we are not the winter.
In a list
A contest entry
- Pools of Sorrow, Waves of Joy by CarCrashHumor.
600 points, ended February 10, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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OH my goodness. This is just immense. It's beautiful and amazing. I love every single letter in this poem. Makes me feel like I'm floating.
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"I want to be a reflection
of the streetlights in your eyes
and
I want to feel my insides
scattered across every
forgotton
suburban
sky"
i love this! thank you for entering! -
This is beautiful.
Every word is so perfect.
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I want to feel my insides
scattered across every
forgotton
suburban
sky
oh that was beautiful. and for some reason the phrase "forgotten suburban sky" reminds of a newsboy riding around on his bike throwing papers when no one else is awake- at 6am in the summer. i know thats not what you intended, but it was still amazing for me.
i picked up "the shepherds dog" the day after christmas. it's amazing. i love iron and wine. -
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amazing
there is nothing to be said,
except perfection in the form of words.
lovely.
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'I want to pin down your words,
cut out into wax,
and melt them into my skin.'
I loved that, makes me want to do that do your words.
how absolutely gorgeous.
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yesyesyesyes.
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"we do not fade,
we are not ther winter."
that. is. insight.
in-flight insight with half a bite of light in this blown-up night, no fright, just white snow for some height and quite seriously in sight.
...hello.
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stunning. to me, this is love.
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I want to be a reflection
of the streetlights in your eyes
and
I want to feel my insides
scattered across every
forgotton
suburban
sky
and
I fucking love it!
beautifully done
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FUkin' A.
gorgeous lines my dear.
just fuckin gorgeous
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i love the subtle sexuality of the candle wax stanza. beautiful.
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Wow!!!
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