If only I could pretend to love you
but how can I pretend what isn't real
If only I was willing to make it work
we would be happy together forever
(or so the story says)
Have you ever wondered why
there are so many love stories?
Simply because love sounds much better when it's to good to be true,
and it makes candy covered hearts and romance cards easier to sell.
People don't really love or want to be loved
they want to be showered with gifts and attention
Diamonds, chocolate, roses
none of it matters
And when the roses die,
so will the cliche of love
For afterall, how could it survive
when diamonds are a girls best friend?
Author notes
one-year
option #9
A contest entry
- Misfortune's One-Year AP Anniversary Contest! {EXTENDED} by Misfortune.
750 points, ended August 26, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Originality: (6/10)
Emotion: (6/10)
Poetic devices: (12/20)
Structure/flow: (7/10)
Cohension: (7/10)
Title relating to poem: (10/10)
Personal opinion: (6/10)
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Speechless, interesting, melancholic, and slightl philosophical. Good Job
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hehe, no problem at all!
I totally love it it's like a million times better! The ending totally makes the whole poem!
Excellent job!
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I loved it
it was so good and its so true the words you expressed...i really liked it....something different keep up with the good work
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i loved it
this was way good, and if you say any different, i'll drive all the way to your house and strangle you. lol j/k but i really did love it. and if i wasn't in the middle of falling for someone amazing, i'd totally agree with you. :] i love you and your work cuz.
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