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My heart was racing,

Driving me further from reality,
The passion and intensity of your breath on my naked skin.

Stifled moans cause bitten lips,
Kisses so sweet yet so powerful.

Licking your way down my neck,
Pausing only to excite me further,
Sucking on my chest which hardened with pleasure,
Yet still caressing my clit with your finger,
Savoring the taste of my sweat with your mouth.

Reaching my jaguar you devour its elixir,
Drinking me in, inside out,
Your groans in perfect harmony with mine.
Eyes rolling back in complete pleasure,
Fingers gripping the sheets in ecstasy,
Your agile tongue moving in and out of me so slow and so fast,
And your biggest muscle aching to have it's turn.
But for now, stay inside of me...

 

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  • cre8tiv-writer
    October 10, 2008
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    I really like this!!


  • Serene Rose
    February 24, 2008
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    oh wow. it was very descriptive and flowed easily. I love it!!


  • Perception
    February 19, 2008
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    Very well done... I think you did a good job on this one. Beautiful..... Nicely done


  • loves toy
    December 13, 2007

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    wow this poem is just beautiful...
    it is a turn in just reading it
    thank you very much for sharing it
    -peace out-
    Rayne

  • angel.of.mine
    December 1, 2007

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    woooooowwwwweee !!! DUK!! ... r u sexually fustrated lol ! well now ... this jus makes me wanna go write sumtin erotic..or even betta... go to my bfs house !! LOL

    *goes to read it again! ttehee


  • ForsakenOne74
    November 25, 2007

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    Couldn't get in to this piece, didn't feel enough emotion from it, not quite enough rawness to it...it felt tamed down...perhaps a first attempt to break in to the topic...or perhaps, the writer is young and inexperienced and it's showing through in to the piece...unsure...anyway nothing here is/was meant to be snide, or mean, just thoughts on the piece, and why it feels luke warm..


  • Laura
    November 25, 2007
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    this is wonderful and wow talk about steamy!! you go girl xx


  • just mercedes gold member
    November 25, 2007
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    intense, arousing and a very nice start to my day, thanks. Jaguar elixir, now there's an image!

  • Bottomofastairwell
    November 25, 2007

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    great

    the imagery is so real and tangible. it's very erotic and sensual, and captivates those moments of of sheer pleasure so well. the ending is well phrased too.


  • Blueskywonder
    November 25, 2007

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    Ooh la la... this is a deeply sensual piece full of intense electrifying imagery.

    A total pleasure to read


  • Emile
    November 25, 2007

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    Very good

    A well written engrossing poem filled with sexual energy that electrify the sinuous currents that build up to heightened awareness with a final and dramatic release at the end. You have painted a picture with words that tantalize, seduce, teas and catapult the reader into a sexual fantasy as we experience your passions.

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