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Little Soldiers

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Little Soldiers

 

 

 

The tree stood tall and proud in a corner of the hall

lights brightly shone throwing patterns on the wall

 

Holly boughs and berries strewn around the room

candles flickered on the hearth, warming winters gloom

 

Family all gathered, one last Christmas chore

decorations in the box, waiting by the door

 

This year would be different, Grandma came to stay

sitting by the fireside, while children round her play

 

Baubles, bells and tinsel, a fairy for the top

candy canes and Santas, now it’s time to stop

 

Children sent to bed for the hour was getting late

one small box was left in the bottom of the crate

 

Grandma sat and stroked the box, tears in her eyes

she had no need to wonder, for she knew the surprise

 

Little wooden soldiers with chipped and tarnished paint

not brash and bright and shiny, to some a little quaint

 

Each one with love was crafted by her husband’s caring hand

she kissed their tiny faces to her they looked so grand

 

She hung them on the tree as a tear hit the floor

her mind transported back to so many years before

 

If only he could see them now up there in pride of place

before her eyes an image of her Harry’s handsome face

 

This would be a Christmas that she’d feel his presence near

surrounded by the family in the comfort felt right here

 

Christmas morning bright and early children from their beds

rushing round the house, thoughts of presents filled their heads

 

Grandma sat contented as she watched their happy faces

toys, games and wrapping paper filling up the spaces

 

After lunch a quieter time children gather round

Grandma tells of Grandpa and the soldiers they have found

 

She stands them on the table in regimented rows

she smiles as each one’s placed, the pride within her grows

 

He made a soldier every year to put upon the tree

the first, the day their son was born ‘til he was twenty three

 

Over years his skill increased they soon became his art

the day their son was killed, was the day he lost his heart

 

Far away from home he was fighting foreign wars

he lay down his precious life fighting for a cause

 

Grandma’s getting tired now and needs a little rest

she settles by the fire clutching soldiers to her breast

 

Her eyes grow dim and heavy as she dreams of days gone by

her Harry standing by her side;

 

she smiles;

 

Her last goodbye.

 

 

 

 

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  • I'm sorry, but this is a gold poem. Only one small point in the only place you failed to rhyme. Otherwise, its a gold poem. Too bad so many others have failed to see its quality.

  • AutumnsFlame
    January 17

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    What a nice little couplet poem! A very touching story too... It almost made me cry. Your rhyme was right on. Not forced at all! Thank you for entering my contest!

  • buggles
    January 16
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    Wonderful write,but yours always are, may they long continue, Eddy

  • Gypsy-Princess gold member
    December 30, 2007
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    So touching and beautiful yet exceeding the 30 word prewritten limit... x

  • Little Feather Greeters member
    December 29, 2007

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    Thank you for your entry

    How very touching. This was beautiful. Such a loving tradition and the story behind it is heartbreaking and loving at the same time.

    God Bless and Merry Christmas
    Tammy


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    December 27, 2007

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    For reasons far beyond the comprehension of words I could fathom, this has hit home to a part of me that stays focused on past memories. My Gran had a box similar to this, and every year it surfaced just once, was dusted off and placed proud of place among the presents...My papa's last present that he never got.

    This is a magical timepiece of a poem, and has so much in it, Thank you for including this one.


  • Swan song gold member
    December 20, 2007
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    This is a lovely couplet poem that tells a wonderful story. well done I enjoyed


  • anaisnais
    December 19, 2007
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    Heart breaking, you capture the spirit/essence of this poem well.


  • onesugar silver member
    December 10, 2007

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    Very touching as I read this it brought a lump to my throat. Beautifully done but very sad.

    Love ~sugar~

  • Chaz D. Wolf
    December 8, 2007
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    Excellent, simply excellent!

    Well done through and though!

  • Winklings gold member
    December 5, 2007

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    An endearing poem of sentiment

    with an interesting title which becomes central to the family love and sacrifice in the telling! And all this is written in enjoyable rhyming couplets which are readily accessible to child and adult at once. Congratulations on gaining a Silver Trophy. Lyndon.


  • Gwenevere
    December 5, 2007

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    Awesome

    This poem brought brought a lump to my throat.So beautifully crafted to the end.To be without our loved one at Christmas but then to at last be by his side again.What more could anyone wish for.A different and excellent write for this season.I wish you a wonderful Christmas and I hope you spend it surrounded by your loved ones.Have a great one.Congratulations on the Silver.It should have been gold, Ros


  • Anna Emkah
    December 5, 2007

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    Well done!
    Congratulations with the SILVER!
    Anna.


  • Frozentearz gold member
    December 4, 2007

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    Very touching write for this time of the year and I thank you for sharing with us, Brings back that special feeling of Christmas,
    Warm thoughts and Happy Holidays,
    Frozentearz
  • Enola Faith
    December 4, 2007
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    AWESOME!

  • FrenchSuzette
    December 3, 2007

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    You get better and better!

    I did not think anything would beat your Nostalgia day but this is so sad and so beautiful.
    Please keep writing but can you make the next masterpiece a happy one!


  • A. L. Armocido - AM
    December 3, 2007

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    I like it very much. I am really enjoying the Christmas season on Allpoetry with all the beautiful Christmas pieces. Good luck in the contest and Merry Christmas.

  • ForsakenOne74
    December 3, 2007

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    Such a sad, yet lovely, touching write. Too many stories like these, mark the passing of time, showing us that even tho many find joy this time of year, many also find sorrow, for some it's a mix of both, I quite enjoyed the reality of this, wonderful imagery, very well penned, *nods* wonderful read, thank you for sharing, good luck in the contest!

    . Rewarded 6

  • carole21
    December 3, 2007

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    touching

    very nice write for Xmas . . good story . . leads the reader well . . like "If only he could see them now up there in pride of place" . . and "the day their son was killed, was the day he lost his heart" . . touching ending as well . . good luck in the contest !

    . Rewarded 6

  • mmook
    December 3, 2007
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    thanks for sharing


  • eternal-devotion
    December 3, 2007

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    Absolutely perfect.

    This was the most heartfelt poem I have ever read. It is absolutely beautiful. It is also so sad that I had to wipe tears from my eyes before I could finish reading it and still the tears flow. I can realy believe that I am in that home with the Grandma and her thoughts on that Christmas Day. You have tremendous tallent for this type of poetry. Every word is precious and heartfelt. I hope that you recieve an award for this.

    . Rewarded 8


  • gullionmar
    December 3, 2007

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    simply beautiful

    what a masterpiece you have penned here this is so brilliantly written and a true pleasure to read a poem so well written,what a wonderful story for the children to here on christmas day,but the loss of a life is never easy but memories made can be cherished when our loved ones pass

    . Rewarded 6


  • Endeavor gold member
    December 3, 2007

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    Excellent

    Grandma’s getting tired now and needs a little rest
    she settles by the fire clutching soldiers to her breast
    Her eyes grow dim and heavy as she dreams of days gone by
    her Harry standing by her side;

    she smiles;
    Her last goodbye.

    As tender as words can be made
    Beautiful thoughts

    Rick

    . Rewarded 6

  • michaeline
    December 3, 2007

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    This is really really great.You have a wonderful gift with the pen.So much sadness and so much love.You tell a story with understanding and great imagry.My hat's off to you for doing such a great job on this.Good luck in the contest.

  • tlsledge
    December 3, 2007
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    I can't say anything but WONDERFUL.

  • NeferMaatNetjer silver member
    December 2, 2007
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    what can i say but touching.

  • silverlinesunset
    December 2, 2007

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    What a beautiful poem. It flowed so smoothly and I loved the ryhtem. Good JOb!!
    ~Ocean~

  • humanornaments
    December 2, 2007

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    Very calming and emotional at the same time. So much depth. Grandma and the tin soldiers represents a lot to me. Completely stunning.

    . Rewarded 4


  • Swtpoetryman
    December 2, 2007

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    A VERY BEAUTIFUL (and sad) PIECE, INDEED - FROM A VERY BEAUTIFUL WOMAN!

    Grandma’s getting tired now and needs a little rest
    she settles by the fire clutching soldiers to her breast

    Her eyes grow dim and heavy as she dreams of days gone by
    her Harry standing by her side;

    she smiles;

    Her last goodbye.


    GOOD LUCK in these two Holiday Contests with this very emotional, heartfelt, soulful, and beautiful piece, my friend! GrandMa sounds like a very special woman, indeed - just as HARRY was a very special man (one in a billion) who it is plain to see was the love of her life and her one and only soul mate! It is so sad that the cost of freedom is often so high and takes away so much joy from those who are left behind.
    Peace & Love!
    Earl.

    . Rewarded 8

  • RainbowQueen
    December 2, 2007

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    The heart is what I liked in this verse. There was sadness, but you also brought a smile to my face with your descriptions. Imagery was awesome.

    . Rewarded 4

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