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Waiting for Him to Wake

 

 

 

You ask me, everyday
- why do you love me?




For the coffee split from pearls of beauty
bubbling in my percolator,
old fashioned girl that I am
on Sunday's, I like to make
a good brew on the stove, the "old gal"
as I call her, isn't going to last
much longer.

her parts are worn, loose fitting
and the little glass button nub in the lid
jingles against the metal rim

But the drink she makes, is rich
and resonant, like the colour
of your skin, close to my hand

touching your morning

I carefully pour in the beans



reach my hands around your middle
sip the hot liquid smile
from your eyes, arabica-ground coloured
gems of wisdom, chase my day

and bids you awake

 

                           awake to my world

 

 





 

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For Him ~~~~~~~~ Michael Thomas

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  • Lj-
    December 4, 2007

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    Favorite part:
    "sip the hot liquid smile
    from your eyes"


    Thank you for your entry,
    Best of luck.


  • Cat
    November 28, 2007
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    i like your nub, too.

    m


  • vaseline
    November 28, 2007

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    i prefer this over coffee

    her parts are worn, loose fitting
    and the little glass button nub in the lid
    jingles against the metal rim

    lmao

    haha besides that slightly disturbing part, this is really cool. i wish someone wrote me such pretty poetry haha. pretttyyy! fuck my vocabulary eh.

  • Suzanne Dia
    November 26, 2007
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    you're just a big sap
    you are
    and you're a beautiful sap, at that

    this unfolds in such a nice way
    i feel like i'm watching a movie sometimes as i meander from you to him to you to him and read
    this love spreading across so many pages

    feels like someone broke the fountain pen, but are happy to see the stain.


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    November 25, 2007
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    Your coffee maker and my stove should get together. lol

    Excellent focus in this, it captures the scent of beans ( which is always much better than the taste ) the way morning is never quite there until you hold that first cup in your hand and say ....ah ...yep...another day..

    I'm not sure about the line spacing after your hand, I've put it right after the word and where it is and I think ..hmm.. it might not be the space but the tense in - touching - I suspect I'm looking for something more active like 'in'
    but I love the image..
    and the way the drawing comes together in the details



    • NurseChilly gold member
      November 25, 2007
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      I might jiggle with "touching" tomorrow... but right now, all I want is a hot bath and bed and I'm still in bloody work

      but hey... coffee will be good in the morning

      • ArtFullyMe gold member
        November 25, 2007

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        *runs bathwater in a plastic bag and tosses it over the pond*

        not really the right size.... lol but it's the thought that counts


        • NurseChilly gold member
          November 25, 2007

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          that's crap!!

          hardly wet my whistle... lmao

          but yes, the thought was lovely

          am home now.. and the bath will happen very soon...


  • RollingStone silver member
    November 25, 2007

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    beautiful!

    this is a very beautiful love poem, rich with meaningful metaphor as well as emotion.

    yes, rich and resonant. really good poem, gill!


    • NurseChilly gold member
      November 25, 2007
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      thankie Travis....

      rich and resonant like I like my man... LOLOL


  • EvilKate
    November 25, 2007
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    I loved the subtle metaphor here - hehe - very richly done indeed


  • Night Hope gold member
    November 25, 2007

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    "But the drink she makes, is rich
    and resonant, like the colour
    of your skin, close to my hand

    touching your morning"

    Dammit, Woman, you're makin' me weep & I detest weeping women. Makes my nose stuffy, my eyes puffy & it ruins my mascara...& unlike the ladies in the movies, it ain't a pretty picture. I weep not only because is this such a beautiful, honest, heart~felt piece...but also 'cause I can't have any coffee & haven't had any since September. I could easily lick this page...& ohhh, I am sooo tempted to. Absolutely gorgeous. I love percolators instead of "coffee makers" (although I do love its "set it to go off before I wake" function...Mmmm...the smell alone would get my lazy butt outta bed) Good luck in the contest, Sweetie...& Michael, you are both far more fortunate than you know, methinks...don't question or over~analyze Love, my Friend...just accept it as your due...I do not think that she is one to love lightly or without good reason...I would imagine you deserve every word & more...I envy you a bit, but it is overtaken by my pleasure that two such incredible souls have found one another. Hugs to you both, my Friends... Wanda


  • IronIcecream
    November 25, 2007

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    when dried lips approach the moist
    abused neurons complaint
    why do I have to think for you
    if you don't mind

    a sip
    no sugar
    milk comes in prose

    this flows so well with Demerol
    would sleep but dreaming won’t let go


    • NurseChilly gold member
      November 25, 2007
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      thankie kind sir



      demerol huh?? painful things eased

      • IronIcecream
        November 25, 2007
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        coffee cup life by request

        lamb skins dancing in the air
        Zoloft filled yet still I don’t care
        spill my guts
        praise Demerol
        preach me about gulf and oil

        good for you and I don’t mind
        Xanax me and trust I’m blind
        coffee hot and shots of dream
        scratch the ache for in between


        • NurseChilly gold member
          November 25, 2007
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          aches of bone
          sinew and time
          release this tramadol mind
          expand and stretch
          foot to floor
          stand, move
          s l o w
          d o w n
          it takes time
          to prize open
          the day, the curtains
          the clothes strewn
          round empty rooms
          round the bends
          and brakes
          of achilles
          and plantar response

          what is this painful
          arthritic span
          of each moment


  • graphite
    November 25, 2007
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    wow sis, this flows so well.


  • Desiree Darkk
    November 25, 2007

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    I love coffee poems. I remember mystysaint wrote one a few years back that I loved. Love this one too. The old coffee pot is spoke of, almost like a lover.

    Okay, I think I would ditch the adict part. I don't care how they discribe it and it muddies the waters and not good enough for this poem.



    Desiree


    • NurseChilly gold member
      November 25, 2007
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      thanks Desi... removed that part and yes it does look and read better now

      thanks for that

      Gill.x

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