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One More Day

I'll show you what I'm made of
I can do it better than you
You're all talk, no action
You think you know what's best
You lecture and degrade me
Saying you know all, no fights
I think it's time to show you
Just who's the strongest here

I know your tricks and weapons
Since you taught them to me
Guess you thought I'd serve you
That I'd be weak like them
You're the one who's learning
Too bad the lesson will end
For soon a bullet will go to your head
And I can forget about you

All I need is one more day
To plan things out for you
The perfect way to see you're wrong
And how right I must be
The blood and gore was all a joke
Until you came along
Like poison, purged and unwelcome
I'll bring you to your end.

Author notes

This describes life in the city Mallepa in the Japanese movie Moon Child, a little after movie inspiration. Watch it, it's one of the best movies ever made. No that's not up for discussion, pull up an internet window and find it, right now. You think I'm not serious? I'm watching you...
xD
Cj

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  • HarvesterOfHearts
    December 2, 2007

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    this poem is so powerful! i've never seen the movie (i geuss now i have to ) but wow i love this poem i can just picture it all out in my head. and it's pretty awesome! this poem is different than the ones you usually write... and it's awesome! good job sis!

    your awesome!

    ~theharvester


  • Mishi-Ragdoll
    November 25, 2007

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    i LOVE this poem. it's hella strong! and you know what you just inspired me to watch moon child right now


  • Dlvvanzor
    November 25, 2007

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    I'll watch it! I like your threat there, very funny. ^^ Then after I watch it I'll come and re-read and comment on this so I know what you're talking about.

    -Dlvvanzor