These are,
the moments of life.
That we live for!
These are,
the moments of life.
That we dream of!
These are,
the moments of life.
That are too rare!
Every time,
we close our eyes.
A moment was missed!
Every time,
we close our eyes.
A memory was made!
Every time,
we close our eyes.
A dream comes true!
Author notes
This is option 12, I wrote this about the gift of being alive, because life is a gift. Also As you asked I am going to submit another poem.
A contest entry
- Shape of Impact by Gossamer Guile.
900 points, ended December 20, 2007, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hmmm... My Turn! by Loveberry.
1600 points, ended April 2, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow! Such simplicity in your words, yet the underlying message still resounds within my mind... You did a fabulous job with this piece!
Good luck in the competition
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WOW!
This was such an amazing piece! i loved it! it made me want to read much more... there is such simplicity in your words!
Your last stanza was simply amazing... It was such a delightful pleasure to read your poem! Best of luck in the contest!
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Delightful,
Your message is clear, abundant and a joy to treasure for the things in life we keep close are the ones which have become memorable may each of your days be as memorable and treasured one after the other
Wishing you much success in all of your endeavors
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May I just say that this is a wonderful piece. The repetition really punches the title. In your third stanza, I believe that you meant "too rare," and the fourth stanza is lacking an exclamation point. But such small errors do not hinder this. Well done.
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This was awesome. Sort of repetitive, but I loved it. You did a wonderful job with this one my fellow poet friend. Good luck to you in the contest and may God be with you throughout all of your days to give you courage when you're feeling shaky, and nervous...to give you strength when you're feeling weak. To show you love, when you feel unwanted. Keep up the awesome job and I loved this poem. Good luck to you in the contest.
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