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Flutter

flutter... flutter...

Quickening rhythms,
giddiness pulsing life.
Flooding radiance
to a almost forgotten smile.
Unshed tears sparkle,
while holding your letter.

flutter... flutter...

Fluent desire roles,
recalling your scent,  
your face, and touch.
Letting your words
enfold my heart.
Praying you will be released,

then never again being apart.

flutter... flutter...

Lashes veiling my soul,
still a few tears slip.
Trembling with love,
recalling your voice;
memories echo through me,
you asked me to wait.
How could I not,
with out you where is my heart?

Author notes

Your Prompt :
When you are in love with someone, you have no need to say good-bye, because you are always in each others heart, there forever staying.

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Delila... Ok this is different for me...
But I am tinkering with my style. hope it is ok.

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  • Desire gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    Wow!!

    Maybe a different style but me likes it
    Wonderful weaving of words Sweet Soul and You
    bring forth emotion for the reader to inhale
    Love this!!
    and the lashes veiling my soul...

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent Beautiful!
    Best wishes to You in the contest
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Arizona Sunset
    December 5, 2007

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    I love what you have done with this poem! It is very lovely, and wow! thank you for sharing, best to you in the contest ~blessings always~


  • penman gold member
    December 5, 2007
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    Excellent

    Tremendous creation, so wonderful expressed. Best of luck in the contest.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    December 5, 2007

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    So True...

    When they are in your heart of hearts, and in your mind day in and out.. how could you say goodbye.. It's nice for someone just to ask you to wait for them.. when you are in love, you'll do just that.. and hopefully you won't have to wait to long.. for the one that loves you, would not want you to I'm sure. Thanks for sharing. Peace, Timothy


  • ellipsist
    December 2, 2007

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    interesting... I like the repetition of the italic "flutter, flutter" it's almost like an inner monologue, but on a subconscious level....

    perhaps I am reading too much into this... different for you, definitely, but an intriguing and fascinating read... gives the reader only glimpses of the fluttering below the surface...

  • michaeline
    December 2, 2007

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    This is pretty good.Like the way it flowed and the feelings in it.Truely a great write and good luck in the contest.You are truely talanted.


  • Swan song gold member
    December 1, 2007

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    Awesome awesome awesome! Dam you are just a shooting star dear. Wow!!!! I am tumbled out of control from the wrold go

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    December 1, 2007
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    I love this Nice job

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    November 24, 2007

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    Your Prompt :
    When you are in love with someone, you have no need to say good-bye, because you are always in each others heart, there forever staying.

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