I want you back my sweet baby boy
please turn back the hands of time,
when tonka trucks brought you joy
and heaping rocks upon which you climb.
Scraped knees and elbows I could mend
with just a simple kiss and hug,
Those precious times we played pretend
still gently on my heartstrings tug.
Your sparkling blue eyes mirror lights
that shine like stars above the trees,
snow white hair glistening in the night
and the world is all as it should be.
Cradling you in my arms of love
as you slowly nod off to sleep,
giving all my thanks to God above
another day this blessing to keep.
Into the portals of my mind I go
and resurface these memories,
treasured times of so long ago
ebb and flow like the ocean seas.
Author notes
This was a hard task to perform in just twenty lines as I could have easily written double that to actually write what I felt in my heart for your son in this beautiful picture. I hope I did his memory justice along with the picture as well.
A contest entry
- Write A Poem For Picture by stavykm.
950 points, ended December 1, 2007, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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A very beautiful and touching work of poerty. I know I for one, would love to have both of my children back to when they were both young again, but I feel this one is more tragic, such as a life who left his family to soon. Your words nor your choice of background couldn't have been more perfect.
~steve~
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What a
tender and warm write. Glad to see you won a Bronze for this. Your write is a fitting one for a Mom longing for her child's first years again & all the happy memories they entailed. Precious flow, content, rhyme & timing. You bring a vivid scene & heartfelt moments to life here. Bravo.
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Beautiful! Those sacred, precious memories we hold so near our hearts. They comfort us when we need to feel that innocent and so unconditional love once again. Great job!
BLESSINGS, Doris
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What a beautiful poem. A very emotional and warm piece. Very well written
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This is a beautiful dedication to our wonderful friend. Congrats on your cup.
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Very well done congrats on the Bronze. I esp- love this part"Into the portals of my mind I go
and resurface these memories,
treasured times of so long ago
ebb and flow like the ocean seas. "
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Children who have died, have been abducted, have gone missing, all of these - sentiments well expressed in these lines. How mothers miss their children. Memories, pictures just do not do the trick. Yet even those which grown up children sometimes miss those says when their children were young and so lovable. Easy to read and understand these lines; good flow and rhythm, rhyme. Nice bronze trophy to add to your collection as well.
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Congratulations on the hardware you got for this one. It was much deserved. You brought back memories of childhood that are always cherished by a mom. I know mine still does. I see it in her eyes and heart. Stay cool.
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a warmth exclusive in its depths...
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When emotional quality is equal to poetical expression then there is not too much to add except - touching to the deepest core of my heart. The loss of my own babies is coming back like ebb and tide. Sigh...
~Sonja~
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Beautiful
You've done more than justice to your son's memories... I can picture you and your son... with your words in just 20 lines you've made a oscar winner movie that is playing right before reader's eyes from the start till the end... this is just preciously heartfelt beautiful poem you've penned here... great flow with choice of simple words makes it easier for the readers to relate and understand perfectly almost as perfect as your poem it self... very well worthy of shiny trophy... thanks for sharing your memories... take care Minoo
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Excellent write
Yes I am sure that the love you hold within their are ore words and to limited woul;d be very hard to do . Wonderful write indeed
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This is such a beautiful poem I love the rythem and it never looses its flow I love the imagery everything came together so nicely it was so sweet to read!!
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my apologies... I did not read the author's notes before...
a beautifully worded tribute...
touching, and heartfelt and deeply heart wrenching...
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oh my gosh! I am so much more grateful for my children after reading this!!!!! I am very sorry you even have to write about your child you no longer have with you. I know you truly do treasure the time you had with him and you will someday see him again.
Avery beautiful write!!!
GBY
Silverbutterfly
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This was beautifully penned, just beautiful, as a Mother who has lost a child, I can tell you this surely impacted the host and touched her heart. Beatiful work
~Tia
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Another
Beautiful write filled with emotion and longing...What more can I say
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So Beautiful
Thank you so much for this poem. It was nice just to cherish and live in the memory without thinking about him being gone. He was such a precious baby and I loved to cradle him so very much. What a gift to have had such a beautiful, precious baby boy. So young and sweet I was and how I loved him so. The title A Time Treasured is so very perfect!! Then the first line I want you back my sweet baby boy. Then the last line treasured times of so long ago egg and flow like the ocean seas. Excellent, precious write! Thank you for entering my contest and good luck in the finals. Blessings Kelle Marie, stavykm
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