one.two.three.four
best friends before, but now no more
[what's the difference between lies&the truth?]
>obviously, i can't tell any longer.<
myjudgementmustbeimpaired
-have i been drinking again?-
*aphyxiation; suffocation*
((let your lungs ^fill^ with the smoke))
as dark and thick as the blood in my throat.
.you always said you hated me.
so why don't you take a seat [in the front row]
&watch me s l o w l y die?
-isn't that what you wanted all along?-
i'm finally giving it to you.
please [don't flatter yourself]
i'm not exactly "apologizing" just yet
this is more of an overdue >requiem<;
something i owe myself [from so long ago].
i have to admit to you [&everyone else who cares]
i've {betrayed} quite a few in my day
&it's been more than one [♥] that i've broken,
but don't you think it's only fair?
((considering all the shxt i have to take))
i'm s-s-sorry [god, that was so hard to say, i almost choked]
&if you don't want to talk to me
(that's ok, as long as this fighting subsides)
cuz cyanide and formaldehyde are blurring my vision
&changing my words around.
but once best friends;;you can't just stop
at least, not in my book.
[[as long as this shxt stops, i don't mind exhaling]]
&♥;
Author notes
yep, she knows this is about us. i can't help it, once ur bffs, it doesn't just end.
actually, this one is one of my favorites too.
i chose option #7
A contest entry
- Options: Emotions by Veeolin.
525 points, ended June 25, 2008, 41 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
be honest.
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ohh. wow. this is awesome!!! i can feel the anger and sadness. i like how you used parentheses and things to enhance the lines. great job!
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I accept the apology. We can't take back what we said, done, or thought. Things can't be how they used to.... what about Melanie? How about she leaves you alone, and you leave her alone, like you two don't know anything of each other, I'm just tired of the fighting and cussing and talking crap.
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i'll leave her alone as long as she gives me the same courtesy. that's a promise.
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I think the wording in here is beautifully done. And the emotion in it is certainly clearly expressed. However, the dirty pretty fix bugs me a bit. It makes me like it a bit less because it just seems too busy. The poem would have been perfect without all the random punctuation.
Good job, none-the-less, and good luck.
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