stones I should have castbut didn’t
litter the floor of frightened me
preventing my exit from self and pain
the shore of "as soon as"laps at my wishes
taunting, teasing, tantalizing
my heart
but I cannot reach the cleansing waterto baptize the sin of lonely from my soul
fear will not allow my crossingof the glorified pebbles weeping rust
now a rich patina with life’s lack thereof
the verdigris green of envy
if only’s favorite shade of regret
Author notes
prompt: pebbles
15 lines
pic courtesy of spiritualangel
A contest entry
- Spiritualangel's 3rd Quicky Contest..PIF.. Picture and prompt inspired/ 15x15x15 by spiritualangel.
415 points, ended November 25, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Oh no, this was deservedly gold, desevedly platinum, a clasic masterpiece unfolding before my eyes, building line from line.
And I can can feel the shades of green as I grasp the height of your talent; that mine would be nearly half as exquisite and pure.
Simply my dear, this is damn, damn good!
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Full of metaphor and deeper meanings, a wonderful write to grab up the HM in this contest. good job...Scott
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fear will not allow my crossing
of the glorified pebbles weeping rust
now a rich patina with life’s lack thereof
Great
best of luck -
This professional procrastinator understands completely. Wonderfully metaphorical.
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Sisi, this so so wonderful...man to I know about stones of reget...my floor is as litter with them, I often find it hard to walk without stumbling over them
Fear is a powerful motive and though none of us wish to be alone, we have been stepped on long enought to know longer have the will or strength to cross that barrier to hope.
So deeply experssed as always...something you do so well.
I am in awe of your beauty.
Best to you!
Love,
sis
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