You run away to a place.
Ware you can run in circles but only find your self.
This place is filled with moutains and never ending seas.And the only person that lives in this place is you.And sometimes you may be approached by a mermaid who will wisper her secrets in your ear.And sometimes you may come past a bug that has fear bottled inside him.And you try tp help theese creatures but you can't because you have fear and secrets too.And thats why you lurk in this runaway place to get away from that.But you cant.Not realy.Because all and all you have to leave this magical land because it is only a figment in your head.And although you go there to hide because your scared.Your just hiding from reality.What happens happens but its all going to be okay in the end.It always is.
A contest entry
- Prayers For My Siblings by Sky Prince Ireland.
600 points, ended November 26, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - For the kids 13 and younger: Anything to cheer me! by Sky Prince Ireland.
300 points, ended January 20, 2008, 31 entries
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Great Poem
I love it!! its the BEST!!!
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It's often nice to have a little place to go to when things are bad, just long enough to feel better and then go back to the real world with confidence and hope. You've told a good story.
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This is a good poem! I really like your style! Keep writing and good luck in the contest!
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I thought this looked familiar. Thanks again for entering. Good luck.
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Good poem. Thanks for entering.
Good luck to you.
Brian -
Loving Place
This is a beautiful written piece. Sometimes it's nice to know that we can escape to these beautiful places to find some form of peace before we have to head back out into reality. My only suggestion is to proof this over for spelling. And, insert two spaces between the period and the beginning letter of your next sentence. This will give your piece more flow allowing the reader to see and feel more. Nice job!! Keep writing...your talent will bloom.
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