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Why I.....?







step by step agitating passions of life
touching depth of soul penetrations,
lingering thoughts infiltrated doors of heart..
now you say, will let you go, How??

addicted to hear moans in longing,
greedy of tempting lustful lures,
body shudders in repeated gestures inebriant
saying in convulsions of wanting more.

sweet tastes of honey of love written in skin.
dreams guarded, feeling put out
in intense taste of strong, immense love,
dreams loads, feeling soul does not deny.

sounds of calm, rest of soul, murmur, secret,
sweet words, silenced sounds, without fear.
glued bodies,written histories, intense odour  
without counting, produce melodies in air.

love comes in life only once deep inside,
handed over my heart without conditions,
now have a habit of existence to live,
may I ask an answer, why I let you go ?

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Prompt: I will never let you go...
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in 'Contest Words I just can't say... by aligurl'

Prompt:
**2. A bittersweet love. Being in love but he pushes me away. Doesn't see waht he has.

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  • aligurl
    January 6, 2008

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    OH I loved this piece. I'm sure though that there was enough reason to let go... Right now I am currently debating whether or not I should let mine go. This makes me wonder, will I feel like this?

    "love comes in life only once deep inside,
    handed over my heart without conditions,
    now have a habit of existence to live,
    may I ask an answer, why I let you go ?"


    My favoreite part. A wonderful write. Youe can feel every emotion rolling off the page. Thanks for entering and good luck in my contest.


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar gold member
    November 26, 2007
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    a spirtual travel in this verse is seen ..I love the message and the intriguing flow of this write touching the universal truth of our life..This is an amazing write revealing the beauty of love just in few simple words..and this is the strength of write..I love this piece..thank you so much for
    sharing this great write..well done....


  • Arizona Sunset
    November 24, 2007
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    I planned to comment earlier, but got called away so this is a beautiful treat to come back to and re read and enjoy. nice way to start my morning. Your poem is full of beautiful imagery, and I really like the emotions you bring to this poem. Wonderful thank you for sharing


  • Tristan Storm
    November 24, 2007

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    WOW. This is truly an amazing poem. Very well written and beautiful imagery and wording.

    Well done and thanks for the great read.

    Hugz
    Himler


  • CherryOnTop
    November 24, 2007
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    This is a very well writen poem. Full of emotion and wonder. Good luck in the contest.


  • PureRomance
    November 24, 2007

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    This is an amazing poem you've got here. You did a marvelous job with this piece. God bless you and keep up the wonderful inspiration and good luck to you and your poem in this contest.

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