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The Essence of an Angel

Je veux être un ange.

Without ivory wings to suspend me in midair,

and a flawless halo to hover over my head,

I have pondered this quagmire for ages:

 

How could I possibly be an angel?

 

 

Je suis pas parfait.

 

My porcelain flesh has been marred by razorblades,

and my heart pierced many times by the arrows of sin.

Too often have I fallen upon my face, unable to wield a sword;

 unable to do more than pity myself.

I am impure, my spirit has been oxidized,

covered with a layer of imperfections.

                                              

How could I possibly be an angel?

 

 

J'ai pleuré, j'ai perdu foi.

 

I have turned away from the light of the father,

forsaken all of the gifts and promised treasures,

in order to seek the pleasures of the world.

I have cursed His holy name more than once,

and I have sought to have my own will fufilled, rather than his.

 

How could I possibly be an angel?

 

 

Mais je suis toujours retourné.

 

No matter the trials, no matter the pain I've been through,

I have always seen the light and the will of the Lord in my life,

and I have repented and sook mercy in his eyes.

I have always tried to help others, I have always tried to

show love and compassion toward my fellow man, even when

they spite me and demand that I leave them be.

 

 

Perfection and strength do not an angel make;

understanding, compassion, and love for fellow men provide the light

that allows a tarnished halo to shine with brilliance once again.

Author notes

Translations (in order):

I want to be an angel
I am not perfect
I have cried, I have lost faith,
but I have always returned.

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Comments

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  • LilyRose
    June 5

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    Vast depths of truth amore wishes granted and felt through tender language spoken uncommonly yet written with golden elegance...merci.


  • CarnalNineTailedFox
    June 2

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    damn this was fricking amazing...thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
  • ecrivain01 silver member
    March 24
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    C'est bien fait ...

    et félicitations sur votre triomphe dans la compétition.

  • volcaniclastic
    February 4

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    The french was a nice touch - I read this a few days ago, and bookmarked it, and now I'm reading it again. I love how the french lines almost make up a poem of their own, as well. The imagery is superb - this is really a great poem.


  • chxntxl
    January 22

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    this is one of the most wonderful pieces i've ever written.

    i particularily liked the french lines, surprising myself when I understood them.

    I have found no dislikes in this poem.

    amazing job.


  • Sandygram silver member
    December 3, 2007

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    Beautiful

    Hello, Congratulations on winning the GOLD. This was so lovly and worthy of the winning spot. Thank you for sharing your amazing talent with us. Take care, Sandy


  • HeavenScent4U
    December 3, 2007

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    Beautiful Could we do God's work any other way? None of us are perfect and ALL have come short of the glory of God. I think it is through our imperfections and sin and growing through trials that God puts us right where we need to be in the deepest part of our hearts to do good. In our growth our eyes are opened and we become whole and closer to Him. In this we want to do good and help others. Anything else I saw here would be senseless babble right now so just let me say, this was very heartfelt, honest and so full of passion. I think you hit on the key word here too "COMPASSION" very well done. Best of Luck in the contest. Be well and be blessed

  • ecrivain01 silver member
    November 27, 2007

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    C'est pas mal ...

    je dois admettre, mais je pense que t'es trop jeune pour avoir des pensees comme ca. Si ta vie a ete aussi perilleuse, et aussi fachante, c'est meme plus mal que ca. J'espere que ta vie ameliorait bientot et que le monde redevienne plein de beaute. J'ai souvent pense que les jeunes ont le pire de toutes choses en vie. Ils ont ces sentiments qui donne de l'angoisse, mais ils ne savent pas encore comment les guerir.

    Bonne chance dans la competition.


  • korculablue
    November 24, 2007

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    A Very Worthwhile Read

    Hello Rosewood Angel,
    I read your poem with great interest and was touched by the depth of your honesty. You have used some powerful imagery to convey your thoughts which you make clear have always been there in your mind, heart and spirit.

    I found myself responding to the concepts of beauty, sorrow, pain, regret, remorse, repentence, vulnerability and overall your honesty shines through.

    Your addition of the French comments next to each verse adds a poignancy somehow to the overall effect.

    I think you are possibly comparing who you are to the popular images of Angels and finding yourself sadly lacking? (as we all are)
    A halo and wings, white shining clothing are all very well, but you are truly an Angel no matter how many times you may accuse yourself of failing, because you always return to the one thing the world is in sore need of, and that is love for our neighbours whoever they may be.

    I thought of the parable.."The Good Samaritan" when I finished thinking about your words. It struck me anew how Jesus very simply asks of us to love one another as he loves us. As we all know only too well, God didn't make us perfect human beings but as long as we get up every time we fall, He is always there to brush us down and say..."Well done oh good and faithful servant"

    It's a lovely poem and I hope you do really well in the contest. Good luck and thank you for the pleasure of reading and knowing your poetry. I haven't been a mem,ber very long here, but I am struck by how very warm and kind you all are without exception.

    korculablue x

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  • Angel w o Wings
    November 24, 2007

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    This is very intriguing to say the least. I love the passion enveloped within your words. The becomings of a true angel of the earth.
    It is these very reasons of knowing that our imperfections, downfalls, and shortcomings bring us closer to living a spiritual life. God does not make angels, our compassion for helping others without reservation, picking up trash on the sidewalk, anything that will bring us together, as one world, makes an angel.


  • Darkend
    November 24, 2007

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    Beautiful

    This is a beautiful piece wrought from somewhere deep within. I especially love the french (I'm assuming its French) interjections and the words have a smooth flow. Please keep up the good work.

    . Rewarded 4


  • mythical love
    November 24, 2007

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    o my god

    this is the most beautiful poem i have ever read.
    i would point out my favorite parts but since that is basically the whole poem i think we can do without that. there are no rough parts. there are no problems. i love this poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    keep writing...
    i will tell all of my friends to read this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    . Rewarded 8


  • storiesuntold gold member
    November 24, 2007
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    Beautiful

    A very well written poem here It truly speaks in volumes


  • Gods-Artgal
    November 24, 2007

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    This is a great poem. I think you deserve to win the gold with this lovely poem. Would you mind me putting this poem in my first poetry book? I do not know exatly when I will publish the book, but I know I am going to.

    . Rewarded 4

  • mmook
    November 24, 2007
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    thanks for sharing

  • Craven Rosewood
    November 24, 2007

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    I so enjoyed reading this wonderous write.

    The answer to the question is the question itself and that is what I love about this poem, whether you realize it or not you show what is the obvious answer to those who have been through this. The question: "How could I possibly be an angel?", the answer: you are only human but God's love and Jesus' sacrifice allows us to bridge the gap. Continue writing this way, it is great poetry

  • ForsakenOne74
    November 24, 2007

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    I quite enjoyed this piece, and thank you for the translations, even those were a fantastic touch once I knew what they meant...very fitting...it is nice to see someone writing on their faith...thank you for sharing such a touching piece.

  • Lost Vampyre Angel Greeters member
    November 24, 2007
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    you bring me hope when it is lost,
    and faith when it is forgotton
    you are an angel to many,


  • Noir mariposa...x
    November 24, 2007

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    I already think you're an Angel!! Certainly are to me
    And don't worry, no body is perfect. it says so in the bible. 'Tis what we're taught at church these days...
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