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Hide and Seek

I live for the hunt.
Hide.
Yes,lets play hide and seek.

I can hear you breathe,
i can see your shadow.

Yes,scream.
Please scream,
it only urges me on.

So soon the game is done..
what a short game of hide and seek..

Author notes

probably not the best, im trying new styles and new topics. XD

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  • skyviewexpress
    November 24, 2007

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    Good start to exploration of poetic options! Very simple, yes indeed... Yes, comparing a childish, innocent game of hide and seek to the demented intentions of a murderer is simply sick. But clever! I always find that in relating two irrelevant topics that are much opposites, creates a strong message. It emphasizes one or the other. Thank you for entering and good luck.