Full of darkness
and sorrow
Heart of love
Never in the open
Constantly watching
From the Shadows
Gazing from darkness
Eternally in darkness
Fighting for joy
and for those loved
Fighting for love
To be loved
and return it
A warrior; a Knight
Watching from the Shadows
The Knight Of Shadows
Author notes
KnightOfShadows
In a list
A contest entry
- Define Yourself by Nighttime angel.
670 points, ended January 22, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is brilliant. Well done. I loved the sad feeling and then turning into hope. Amazing job and keep up the good work.
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Thank you
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Excellent imagery here - I can almost see the Knight of Shadows standing in front of me.
"Fighting for love
To be loved
and return it"
That, I think, is something we all can relate to.
Keep on writing; you're good at it!
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fantastic writing ! this was deep and raw. how true for so many of us, with so much to give and hiding in the shadows ...waiting. congrats on the shiny!
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Thank you
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Very deep and profound, I really enjoyed it
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Thank you
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Superb
A very nice poem, actually. Perhaps, as "kristian 28" said in a rather negative manner, a bit plain; but I actually like this poem because of that, in a way. For this doesn't come off as a song or some epic ballad, it just rolls off of my mind's tongue as I would imagine some dark hero's entrance would be harbingered in a book or play.
As I read it, I automatically end every line as if it had an elipses, pausing dramatically after each verse. I can almost imagine a knight in black plate walking forth from the shadows to stand on stage before me, suddenly bathed in light, but yet still in darkness, still unseen. Then in the last line I automatically insert another elipses so that it would read "The Knight... Of Shadows" and then my criticism is that, "Ah! I want it to continue!" For at that moment, it just seems perfect for the dark hero of the play to begin some great monologue.
Thank you for giving me such a vivid image from such simple devices. Ye writers who read this - take note of that.
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I'm glad you enjoyed my poem. I appreciate your feedback, and yes I may decide to make it longer sometime. Thank you
-Steve-
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Sounds like a less revenge driven Batman, Batman is cool.
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Thank you and yes Batman is cool
-Steve-
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Nice
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Thank you
-Steve-
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It's been said before, but so has everything. It's how you tell something, and I like how you told this. Has a nice anthem feel to it. Good job.
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Thank you so much
-Steve-
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I ussually dont point out anything i dont like ,and although i like this poem,and it is crafted well,the sentences are so obvious,and everything it´s so apparant in it ,that it feels so stale from the get go,thatś it..,like i wouldnt read it 3 or more times,it´s just so blatantly clear,and the rhymes,which somebody said 100times before at least like-shadow-sorrow-what-the-fu..k-ever
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I appreciate your honesty
-Steve-
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Heh, tis you
nice work...
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Ah darkness and shadows, where I to dwell. A superb poem, good luck in the contest
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thank you
-Steve-
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I love this poem. yet so sad, but so profound. this describes you so very well. this is great, I am so glad that you submitted this.
good luck in the contest
kat
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thank you I'm glad you enjoyed it
-Steve-
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I like this and feel like i am just one of those Knights also...waiting to rescue some fair damsel in distress, but every being hidden amidst teh sahdow..nicely done,
Evan
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Thank you for such a nice comment
-Steve-
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very nice poem i like it alot <3
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Thanks
-Steve-
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Nice write , I could see this as I was reading it , Storm
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Great atmosphere in this write-everyone has their knight..x
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this is awesome, great poem. I really like this one. you should put this on your authors page. great job
kathy
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beautiful.
as usual. <3
huggle
Abby
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it's really deep and it actaully reflects you. you really do watch from the shadows and you are my knight of shadows
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