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Him and Her Part 4: Will the Happy Ending Ever Come?

As she wept against his shoulder she kept thinking of what might happen any second.
He didn't question why she was crying, he thought she would be happier to see him.
She suddenly stopped, realizing she was ruining the moments they had together.
She embraced him once more, and ran toward the sea, her arms flung out so she might hug the incoming wave.
He followed her and did the same, wanting to feel her new explosion of joy.
As the wave knocked them off their feet they laughed, not even thinking of who might be there.
They started swimming, wishing that it would never be dark.
They started to float with the slow roll of the waves, forgetting all about where they were.
She held onto him as if her life deepened on it.
He did the same to her.
Never once did either of them look back to the shore.
Suddenly vibrant vibes came from the ocean floors.
She laughed at it, she knew what it was.
Her cell phone was being called.
He laughed once he realized what it was.
Simultaneously she leaned into him and kissed his lips, just wanting to feel his lips brush on hers before something terrible happened.

He leaned back into her, sharing the same thoughts.

They stared there, lip locked, wishing that nothing would interrupt them.

Sadly this wish did not come true.

A siren louder than three train engines going at once started.

They looked up with their hair dripping wet from the salty water.

They started swimming to shore, wondering what would happen to them.

Impulsively the water began to shake terribly, drifting them apart.

She went toward shore as he drifted farther away.

He yelled to her and she yelled back, too distant to be understood.

She couldn't gather her thoughts the subject kept going back to how come this was happening to her.

As she came back toreality she remebered she must find help.

Then she thought, what if everyone has gone to shelter because of the alarms.

She quickly paddled toward him and he became more than a samll speck.

He came more and more clear to her as she paddled.

Soon enough she was in his arms once more.

They embraced eachother, only now their lives did depend on it.

She kissed him and he kissed her back until the salt water built up in their mouths from staying up surfuce.

They dipped under water, ignoring the thing most on their minds.

The new danger had surfaced with them as they gasped for breath.

 

 

 

 

To be continues.................................................(again, sorry).............................................

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Is this more of a story or poem???

link to part 5: http://allpoetry.com/poem/3684722

Does this make a good fourth part?

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  • AMAZIING!!


  • Nephlim
    December 22, 2007

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    Poems can be stories so with this there is no "or", it's both because they can be interchangeable ^-^
    These two have some rough breaks, someone just does not want them to be together it just goes to show the power of human will can be more compelling then just plain fate-unless fate willed for the human's wills to be so strong hmm Funny thing about fate, you never really know if you actually did defy it or if by fighting it you fit right into the plan ... I dunno, rambling I am, but awesome poem
    GREAT job
    diggin it majorly


  • warrior-eagle
    December 8, 2007

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    I didnt really understand this part
    why was there an ambulance(or will that be the nxt part?)
    and.. why were they almost drowning?..

    But either way this was still amazing and pardon my lack of understanding.

    ...Simply Me♥


  • Bohemianwriter
    November 28, 2007

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    AWESOME!!

    NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO STOP DOING THAT!!!!, UR EVIL I TELL YA! EVIL!!!, BUT AN AMAZING FUKIN WRITER!!, ONCE AGAIN A GREAT WRITE! AND YOU KEPT THE SUSPENTION GOING!....NUMBER 5555555!!!
    WE WANT 5!,
    WE WANT 5!,
    WE WANT 5!,
    WE WANT 5!,
    WE WANT 5!,
    WE WANT 5!,
    WE WANT 5!,
    WE WANT 5!,


  • Astral Flare
    November 26, 2007

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    Woo hoo no more semicolons!!! I really enjoy reading your series, as there's always something new and unexpected around the corner...Great work, thanks for sharing.
    -Tim


  • And Hyetal
    November 25, 2007

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    ooooooooh... Write the 5th part soon!!! I'll definately be back to read some more! GREAT!

    Always,
    Cassie

  • lyrebird gold member
    November 25, 2007

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    I haven't read the first three parts
    *hangs head in shame*
    but this piece is great!
    Yes, it is more in the format of a story than a poem, but nevertheless, its excellent, I can't wait to read the continuation.

    Some slight typos though:
    deepened = depended
    toreality = to reality
    remebered = remembered
    samll = small
    eachother = each other

    (Sorry, I'm a bit of a spelling and grammar freak and if it annoys you, just ask me to stop and I will.)

    - Jojo aka sinnocence


  • storiesuntold gold member
    November 24, 2007
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    Very well done and I couldnt stop reading .It says to be continued I cant wait

    Wonderful; write here my goodness the suspence is killing me


  • Downloaded Love
    November 24, 2007
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    HEHE

    I forgot to give you claps... hehe

  • Downloaded Love
    November 24, 2007

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    WOW

    That Is Amazin!!!!!
    There is a whole story in that poem.... but i think its both! and the language is awsome!... I love it!! so sweet

  • ForeverHisAngel
    November 23, 2007
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    wow. i like tis its intense and sweet the same time. how can i getthe thefirst on you wrote/


  • Falling.Again...Xx
    November 23, 2007

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    wowza

    That was truly amazing but you need to just get on the computer and write untill your done. You leave us hanging and it drives us insane!!!! Please continue!!!!


    -B♥

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