I wanted something so bad
but now I wana give it back
It's true the truth hurts
It's killing me
I tried for something so long
to get it thrown at me
Why do I live?
Why do I go on?
I dont think there is any sence in it
I'm tired
I just wana give up
To thow it all behind me
and never look back
To never see you, hear you,look in your eyes
never see that smile on
your lips when I make you laugh
I will never make you laugh
you will never make me laugh
all you make me do is cry
I love you
Now I guess
I dont gota sit around
and wounder why
cause you have told me
you have told me the truth
that I have been forever longing for
I dont want it
take it back
let me sit here and cry
let me wonder why
let these tears tell my story
let my sobs fill the air
I just dont care
Let me take today back
let me take the past 3 years back
let me take my damn life back
just dont make me live like this
dont do this to me
Let me die
please cause i dont wana cry
i hate crying
please i am now begging
Let me die
Don't ask why
please just end my life
I can't take this
I can't play this game
I liked the old one
just fine
even tho i never realized it
Dont make me live this one
I will not make it threw it
soon I will die
so please now
end my pain
cause I will not play this game.
written on December 15, 2002
Author notes
I wrote this about my best guy friend who i was in love with threw 3 years of highschool... and one day i got up the nerve to tell him i loved him .. and he looked at me and told me i should not love him that i was his best friend....and i was scareing him and then he walked away.. there standing in the empty hallway my heart broke into a million peices... it was never the same after that.. even tho after wards we had a long talk and he told me he loved me as his best friend.. its been almost 5 years now since i have seen him and i miss him everyday!!!!
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- [[ Hate to Love You ]] -PW Allowed- ENTER PPL! D= by ThatONEweirdChick.
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Wow that's a lot of emotion, I agree with my twins comment on this (theoneweirdchick) . She does have the same thing going on, hurts like a *** cause I gotta hear it from her all the time! lol. nice poem.
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Again, the spelling mistakes were weird to look at, especially in a poem. I'm not saying I don't make spelling mistakes, but ...
Okay, so anyway, I like this poem. Reminds me of what I've been through too... Even though I'm only 13. -
Judge's Thoughts
I first want to point out that I believe "sence" should be "sense" and just to note I usually see 'wanna' spelled like that. As well as 'gotta' for 'gota'. Also... in one of the stanzas you say "cause you have told me - you have told me the truth" I believe that would flow better if you used 'had' or 'you've' instead. Threw should be Thru. Well now that I've gone over all of that. This poem, otherwise, is pretty good. I totally get the feelings because I have a really similar situation. Great write, as I said..thanks for entering. -
You are so true my friend revealing the secret strength of the love which can change the life and can bring the beauty in our life..you touched the essence of this love as whole here..I love this piece..somehow it is a prayer of love..for love..and to love..a great write I love this piece..well done...
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This started off so well I felt the emotion, kind of turned on me in the last few lines.. couple of spelling mistakes which could be tidied up but a good job all the same
Karen
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