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Whimpering

God, a lame Christ pose,

a martyr dressed
like beryl blue
In plaster molds
how could anyone love
a voice.

Are these revnants
so make believe?
a miraculous verbatim-something
echos from the lips
of deities, that we revel
in their sloth-colored words

In our sleep, we suggest
that within the virulent hives
feathered rats and gallow birds
weave tears above our dream clouds
and mourn our dying seconds

we mistake their feathers for tears
lost in their flight
opposite of our direction.

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  • creationsfromheart
    January 29, 2008
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    this is an excellent write nice use of vocabulary and punctuations.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    November 24, 2007

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    As is the poets inherent style the write has a good command of grammar,original thought and thought provoking.How can we love a voice? Perhaps we should only love the voice of reason that has rationale? Did God make man in His image or do we make Him in ours...


  • SpinCycle
    November 23, 2007
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    a healthy vocabulary is always attractive...