she walks so freely
she knows what i do not
her mind free
of all temptations the world has to offer
she is young
but i hope with time
the world wont corrupt her
as it has others
she cares not of the way i look
or anyone for that matter
she just wants to learn
she is brilliant
J.V.
A contest entry
- 6 OPTIONS...I HOPE YOU WILL LOVE IT, PREWRITES ARE ALLOWED by Romily.
380 points, ended November 27, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Children. by forbidden-colour.
300 points, ended January 10, 2008, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think in general? Improvements?
Comments
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hmmm.. nice but did you mention in which option you entered this?
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