The words are swirling through my mind
When ranting on they're plain to find
Looking for sense
and one more line
One not too stretched or overhyphed
Trying to bring forth something new,
Damn the cliches and 'i love you';
Searching for words
rare and intense
that will sound cool
and still make sense -
If I pull them straight as they come
won't sound poetic when I'm done,
then if wrapped up
in metaphors
to hide the meaning
at last floor
Some might get nothing in the end,
and say I write of leaves and sand
or think my write's
a unique bind
of things which never
struck my mind.
But keep on writing till on stall
Some might still get it after all
You may just win
a few awards,
To hang them on your AP walls
Get one blowing remark or two
Of folks who seem to hash like you
Just free your mind
and let it out
Maybe that's all what
'tis about
A contest entry
- RANT! by knock.
450 points, ended November 24, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Exasperated? by RatherImaginative.
1750 points, ended December 18, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - PREWRITES WELCOME! CAN YOU WRITE AND LAUGH AT YOURSELF TOO? This contest is for you!! by Ears2hearyou.
900 points, ended March 1, 2008, 26 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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lol
This was interesting
lots of babbling here...venting
ranting on about things that
don't exactly make
sense...Wonderful Job!
Love the background
goes with the
title
"Swirling Out."
Good Luck in The Contest! : )
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Loved it...i really enjoy a good rant
and this one was really cleverly done!
Fun to enjoy and it really stuck with me too...the beats
and rhythums are wise lessons for us all to learn, and
way too much negative is associated with rants....this
one sure proves the power of a good fun natured rant!
one we can all relate to that's for sure!
ears2hearyou
Kathleen : )) clever,cleverly done! loved it!
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Interesting write, very true, the cliches which keep on 'cropping up' are quite annoing, and there should be something strongera nd more true to say, something new. A great write, great message, and great rhyming. Thanks for entering
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THIS IS TERRIFIC -- OUTSTANDING
I LOVE THIS. I can understand this, and it rhymes. It rhymes real well! I agree with it (its message), too.
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A worthy rant, and one I can well relate to.
We try our best (sometimes) to be original, all the while suspecting that there's almost nothing we can say that hasn't been said before in some fashion or another. Though the phrasing of your piece is a bit choppy to my eyes, you've a nicely consistant rhythm and a smooth rhyme scheme. Thanks so much for entering my contest!
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Thanks a lot for your comment! Yes, being original has its hard times, both as you struggle to do it and others struggle to understand you. I know, the words are quite choppy as I said for once I'll just let them out as they come.
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ive thought and wrote about this too.i mean, the primal instinct of a writer is to express thoughts and emotions in words. But do you dress the words up or just let them pour onto the page.i dont have an answer to that,
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