Mommy wake up
Daddy you too
but neither would budge
they were already blue!
Crying in a crib
from a room down the hall
was their littlest angel
and her unheeded calls.
All four of them stood there
at the foot of the bed
as the oldest explained
Mommy and Daddy are dead.
The stench of their passing
still filled the air
and their children now orphans
cried in despair!
Heroin affected
coursed through their veins.
A hot shot in hiding
had ended their pain!
New man of the house
on his face a sad smile
picked up the phone,
and started to dial.
Nine one one answered
a little boy cried
I think my Mommy
and Daddy have died.
When you're only nine
it's hard to understand
the affects of addiction
on a woman and man.
Three years ago, they
were taken away
placed with a family
told they could stay.
Children and youth
championed their cause
taken from their parents
without hesitation or pause.
And then the good news
Mom and Dad had gone straight.
They all packed their bags
and could hardly wait!
They walked up the steps
all holding hands
and into the arms
of a proud sober man.
Now go up the stairs
and see your Mother.
She has a special gift
a new baby brother.
Happy and content
a family once again.
Of this they never doubted
they only questioned when?
Responsibilities of family
a three year reprieve.
The pressures and the pain
they only sought to relieve.
Three years of sobriety
in a moment thrown away.
Children, love and life lost
too dear a price to pay!
Author notes
The diease of addiction, not only affects the addict. It affects every life they touch. I truly believe, there is not a single person in the civilized world that has not been touched by this malady of the heart, mind and soul! So much for civilation! Hehe
I have been clean and sober since 3-31-06 and remain vigilant over my thoughts. I am powerless over the thoughts, but not where I take them!
This poem is not true event in my life, although my best friend did die in my arms from a "Herion Overdose" The heroine is much stronger than it was when I got clean and this poem is a shadow of whats waiting for me if I stop loving life.
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A contest entry
- depresion poetry! i want your best sad poems! by PurpleLogic.
450 points, ended December 2, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
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1500 points, ended August 9, 2008, 43 entries
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450 points, ended September 1, 2008, 18 entries
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1900 points, ended February 9, 42 entries
Gold trophy winner
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20000 points, ended March 12, 38 entries
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wonderful
I can feel the pain, the despair...the loss. This poem is wonderfully written and many people can relate to the situation. I know I can. Thank you for entering my contest. Good luck!
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A really great write. Thank you for entering.
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really great!!!and i like that the poem do express a lesson.....
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This was an incredible poem! It was very very sad. However it sends a good message. And the ryhme flowed so well. It was amazing! Thank you for entering my contest
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This really touched me, growing up with parents who were meth addicts is a harsh thing, I can only imagine how awful it must be to have heroin addicts instead. Thank you so much for entering this extremely moving write.
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wow. really well written and it says alot. addiction does ruin more than just their lives. this is an amazing pice and i really liked it. a great job.
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This is definitely depressing. It's so upsetting to lose even a family member, let alone both of your parents. I couldn't even imagine. Congratulations on being sober for so long; stay strong. Thanks for entering.
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Wow. nice job. there is a good chance that you'll be a finalist
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Wow. Good luck, keep on fighting!
Really good poem.
Thanks for entering!
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aww this is so sad. This is an excellent view of how your choices affect not only you but those around you. Excellent work. Thank you for entering this into the contest. You've received 10 points for this poem. You've got a total of 87 points. Thanks for entering the contest and best of luck toyou. Kahy
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Oh my Goodness. That is a fabulous poem. I'm speechless.
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a deeply sad and emotional write that i am sure will touch every reader, congratulations on gaining your life back, my eldest daughter has fought and won the battle against heroin and w eall still take one day at a time, you have got your life back again now my friend and i hope you live it to the fullest remmebering that good or bad you can survive both without drugs, you must be strong to have got this far. thank you for entering and good luck in the contest
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so the parents didn't die? they just almost did, but got better? either way, tis was amazing! it was...wow...great job!
Alicia Lynn
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If you re-read the poem you'll find in the first stanza, reference to them being blue!
Mommy wake up
Daddy you too
but neither would budge
they were already blue!
PS If your skin is blue... You're dead
Also the third and fourth stanzas
All four of them stood there
at the foot of the bed
as the oldest explained
Mommy and Daddy are dead. (Psst. look at the line to the left, hint hint)
The stench of their passing (Psst. look at the line to the left hint hint)
still filled the air
and their children now orphans ( Psst. look at the line to the left hint hint)
cried in despair!
Did you not read this poem?
Were you on the phone with somebody while you were reading it?
Not only is there a reference to their death in stanzas 1, 3, 4,
but also in stanzas 5,7 and 17
I suggest that you should re-read this poem again "Slowly"
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I am DREADFULLY sorry I misinterpreted you poem...you see, I saw it that the oldest child THOUGHT their parents were dead. And just for the record, just because you're blue does NOT necessarily mean you're dead. I mean, many many babies are born blue, but does that mean they're dead? no, it does not because many of my alive friends were born that way. And when I read the lines
And then the good news
Mom and Dad had gone straight.
They all packed their bags
and could hardly wait!
They walked up the steps
all holding hands
and into the arms
of a proud sober man.
Now go up the stairs
and see your Mother.
She has a special gift
a new baby brother.
I thought that meant their parents had gotten better, went to rehab, and cleaned themselves up. How COULD I have misinterpreted that???
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this one was sad i loved it though thanks for sharing good luck
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i am utterly speechless!!! i see this all too often and it breaks my heart every day. thank you for your wonderful entry and welcome to the finalists. viyanna rosemarie
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This is truly a beautiful piece, deserves the gold.
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Wow, this is brilliant. I dont even know what to say. The flow of this is perfect. Your words made me cry!! Your emotion is so strong and powerful. Although this is not a true story (and thank god!) it is very true to many i am sure. congratulations on being clean for so long and i hope you continue to stay strong and resist the temptation. Thank you for entering my contest
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aw very nice write you have here very sad but full of emotion and pain. thanks for your entry and best of luck to you in the future and with your writing.
andi
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awwwwwww! thats sadish.
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Most deserving of the trophies - and for you, also, congrats and kudos for staying clean, I can only imagine the strength of will that it must take. Best wishes for you on your continuing journey dear poet
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This is very beautiful, I know what it is like to have your family torn apart because of addiction. This is very good, and best wishes in the contest!
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I love it and i love that you put the option in the notes. thank you for your poem it sure makes me glad im now clean and is very inspiring. Herion is spelt Heroine just though i would let you know
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wow gave me goosebumps reading this awesome
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You have terrific rhyming skills here. I know someone I care about had an addiction to alcoholic. He final after all these years got sober and it fixing the problem. It takes real strength and courage to admit you have a problem. This poem tells what happens if you let it run your life. Thank you for entering it.
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Wow, great,
I love it.
Good job.
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this is really good, great flow, rhyming, and meaning. good job and good luck.
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Thank you for your entry in the contest. A very heart felt write that would touch the heart of any reader and your author notes tell an equally strong story. Rhyme and flow are good. Thank you for sharing your feelings with us.
All the best
Sue and Jeff
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So touching. Your story sounds a great one. I was engrossed in this poem from the very beginging, i hung on its every word. Very powerful.
Thank you so much for entering and good luck to you.
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amazing! this had me from the very first line. such an emotional and sad write. glad it wasn't true but so sorry about the loss of your friend.
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Great rhyming, and extremely sad. I cried reading it but that's what i look for in a poem. Deep, very deep. Cut through me like a knife to tell the truth..And since i know the terrible things drugs do to people, i can relate to this. Best of luck in my contest and thanks for entering
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Thanks for entering. Shancy.
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Wow, Great write. Well written and very sad, I have to say this one really got to me, well done. Thanx for entering and good luck!
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ouch. this definitely qualifies as a sad story. thanks for entering.
i like the way you alternated between telling the story and the viewpoints of the children. adds to the impact.
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this was definitely a tear jerker. thank you for entering it!
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ohhhhh my goodness, this is so sad. I am in awe and on the verge of tears. Is this all true????????????????
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thank you for entering! this is such a sad, sad tale, and you make the emotions seem so real! you did a great job! and good luck!
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OH MY GOSH this is a sad story painted within these words. Thank you for the entry and the very best of luck to you in this contest.
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very strong write you have here.
it is true the pain and hurt from such addictions
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I am at a loss for words right now.... You certainly have captured the childrens pain and harsh reality of addiction in the eyes of a child. Great job! And this is one kick ass write!!
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I don't know what to say! When we're using we don't think it'll kill us, even if other addicts are dying around us. When addicts are viewed through the eyes of children it brings out the stark reality of the killer disease. This is powerful!
Peace Georgia
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wow!
amazing write doll
it was hard to read to telly ou the truth
it was so sad but good all at once
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Thank you for entering. Very strong piece of writing.
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I'm still wiping away tears.. This is truly beautful.. Thank you so much for your entry
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Good write. It's absolutely heart wrenching. Thanks for entering.
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woah once again..
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Beautifully penned piece, it saddens me that this could ever happen, you have a few grammatical errors, but overall it was beautiful. Thank you.
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Sad...
A very touching poem. But how does this reflect you? I think you mean 'angel' not 'angle' in line seven, and 'to' may be meant to be 'too' in the last line. Overall, good job, and good luck.
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So tragic!
This poem is well written and tells the story simply but extremely well. Good luck with your entry. Will definitely read more of your work. Julie.
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this is good! I like the consistency of the rhyming scheme. Well constructed and it tells the story simply. Good write youve got here
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Outstanding
This is Amazing!! So much heartache and despair but they manage and God sought to see them through. Excellent Write!!
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Three years of sobriety,
In a moment thrown away,
Children, love and life lost,
To dear a price to pay!
This is indeed an impressive work revealing the truth of life also the immagery here is the true picture of this nature..You touched the essence of the subject..This is indeed a wonderful work ..well penned with sharp and strong impact..well done...
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wow.
amazing.
my favorite so far!
i love your imagery, and now just how these children are fealing. well done and good luck, and thanks for entering such a wonderfull and tearfull piece!
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