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my rock

Mommy was a queen leaving me her princess.

Daddy was superman making him my hero.

He would throw me in the air and I thought that I could fly.

With a five year olds eyes waking up from a nightmare

he stood before me and whispered it was just a dream.

When I was little, I believed everything my dad said when I was scared.

Blinded by my fears I couldn’t see his fear in his eyes.

Mommy fell from her thrown leaving me in the hands of fate.

And daddy is still my hero just with out a cape.

Now I sit with 5 year olds eyes 22 years later

Waiting for him to say it’s just a dream.

But I’m not five anymore and this isn’t a dream but a nightmare that’s real.

When he looks at me all I see is the fears and tears in his eyes

he knows this time, it might not be all right

I want to be five again

things were so much easier when monsters were under my bed rather than in my mind.

I don‘t know why I see only one way out…but I know what keeps from leaving and that’s the love in his heart

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  • crazziladi
    November 27, 2007

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    Wonderful piece I really thinks this reflects through th eyes of a child and adult and reality in those eyes!!


  • vampire.lust.death
    November 25, 2007
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    aaaawwwww i love it it sweet and nice


  • lindaburns gold member
    November 24, 2007

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    I could be wrong but I don’t think one poet CAN change another poet’s work. I hope they can’t. I had to take your words out of “Kristen” to read them but I did that on my word processor. I think you mean “Daddy’s” when you say “daddies”. Just one Daddy. Right? Rather than child abuse here I think I may be seeing “you and me against the world”. I wasn’t sure for a moment. Thank you for entering my contest.

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    I asked they system keepers if one poet could change or add to another poet's work. They said
    "[ticket 53926] If I understand your question correctly, no, it is not possible for a member to edit another member’s work unless they have been given rights as a collaborator. As for comments, no, the only thing that one member can do is remove comments that another members has left on their work. They have no power to edit them to change wording.

    John" **************************So you should be safe.


  • kidwithgun silver member
    November 23, 2007

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    a very emotional piece for me. i'm one of those guys that can totally relate to this i think.. and i say i think cuz i can never tell what it's truly about. but i know what it means to me and i love it.

  • Zinzo
    November 23, 2007

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    Very expressive

    This is a very honest heart-felt piece. I really like the font you choose to use also. As far as the subject matter I can relate to wanting to die but not doing it because you don't want your loved ones to have to go through that. Sometimes thats the only thing that keeps me hanging on. Oh and I think you misspelled throne. This is a very well written piece. Thank you for Sharing.


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    November 23, 2007

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    a touching poem, filled with emotions that speak of fears and inner turmoil. Having 2 daughters myself, I can relate to this on a father's level. I'm left guessing at the Mommy fell from her throne part, it can imply many things. Very well penned, and enjoyable read.
    Rory


  • PureRomance
    November 23, 2007

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    This is a very beautiful poem. I loved it all. The picture it put out and everything was marvelous and breath-taking. I am sorry that you have been through this and I hope you win this contest. This poem definitely deserves it. Keep up the excellent work and God bless you my fellow poetic friend. I hope you had a wonderful Thanksgiving and hope you have a fantastic/white Christmas.

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