Its all about my feelings
Its hard to even chill
Its hard to stop thinking
To keep my mind still
Its all so emotional
But I know I'll get through
Its all so head messing
And its caused by you
I am a person
Thats meant to matter to you
My feelings are real
I care what you do
But you dont care about me
As much as you should
You dont love me as much
As somebody could
I wish I hadn't fallen
As hard as I'm in
I wish you hadn't played me
WELL DONE! YOU WIN!!
Author notes
This poem was written was I was in a very bad relationship and felt like I was in way too deep.
A contest entry
- In To Deep... by Daizy21.
850 points, ended December 8, 2007, 23 entries
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Excellent
I enjoyed reading this piece---Your sincerity, hurt and anger is evident in its writing.
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I think you will relate to it----AL
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I enjoyed the brush strokes in this sad writ because of the flow as well as the message. Poetry isn't poetry just because of a lot of words scientifically formulated, but because others can draw from it and relate it to ones own life. You have penned true sadness and love with a beautiful clarity. It is painful to love so deeply, only to have the love betrayed or taken for granted. There are many reasons that people give such depth of love, there are no formulated guidelines. I have sadness for that one who has lost such a pure love. It is rare and may never come around again. The great thing is that you were afforded closure, and I hope that the experience has not caused you to stop lovingwith the completeness that you have in the past. Thanks for sharing such a wonderful writ, and best wishes in the comp
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This is a stunning poem, you followed my rules pefectly, I thank you for that!
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