She left me standing on the square,
feeling so let down
My pride
falling
in with all
the five o'clock
shadows.
A contest entry
- One Prompt...Now Make It Work by Dalaney.
825 points, ended November 30, 2007, 10 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Stellar! It is wonderful when you can take a single image like this and reflect an emotion. You have told a whole story here, with out using a ton of words. I loved this completely!!!!!!!!!!
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This is good
I like the way you wrote this
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I like this short simple and funny whitty. Excellent!
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Damn, Joe...you are on a roll!
Perfect in every way. Love, Lane
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Oh, now this is spectacular! The way these words are arranged to echo the thought it poses. This just
widens my smile more each time I read it...to think of a mind that can envision such a comparison. Blue
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Blue
Thank you so much for your kind words.
Joe
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