Walking hand in hand,through the halls together
the silent stares and distant glares
you said you'd be mine forever,
you let me keep beleiving that like was fun and games
and now I lie here fallen
with only you to blame
You pulled me aside one day, and said we wouldn't work
that day my life ended
how could you cause so much hurt?
you and your friends laughed, at my innocence
and now I understand
why ignorance is bliss
I'd been thrust into reality, where all of my tears fall
and no one really cared
if I was alive at all
I'd finally had enough of all the pain and strife
I couldn't let you go
I'd had it with my life
Weilding a deadly razor in my trembling hand
as I whispered to myself
"I hope you understand"
Slash after slash my wounds grew deep
my heartbeat grew fainter, my body so weak
eyelids heavy, I gasped one last breath
and slumped to the floor in a sleeping death
I don't know if you cried, I don't care anymore
the only thing I ever really wanted
was my hand in yours.
Author notes
Well I guess I did two of them;
Option One: Losing Love
((Describe how you had gotten love only to lose it))
Option Four: Pain, Sorrow, Cutting, Suicide
((Write about exactly that.))
A contest entry
- Angels With Broken Hearts by ChemicalArtemis.
400 points, ended December 24, 2007, 23 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - LOVE, we all need it, happy, sad, very emo, every one, so lets write about it. by SirensSong.
399 points, ended December 15, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - A love that was never real but the pain after was by MysteriousMoonlight.
875 points, ended December 29, 2007, 58 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Even after reading it once and then a second time it still surprised me! good luck in the contest!
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Removing to close this contest. please enter in other contest
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I'm sorry but could you please re enter this poem in a new contest i am holding because of some error made this contest will be shut down a new one will be started same type so don't change the poem please!
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fabulous
you had me goin that it was a romantic type thing
but then it totally switched and you captured the agony of losing love!
i can absolutely relate to the whole pain after losing love. it hurts like hell. anyways great job!
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this is a good poem!i wasn't sure about reading it from the title i had a different expectation and so you totally changed it and that's awsome!
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