Savoring the touch of his lips against mine,
ecstasy whispers love songs down my spine.
As two bodies blend into one,
lingering touch leaves me undone.
Excited beyond my wildest dreams,
desire burns where love regimes.
Writhing tongues dancing to its own tune,
intertwined bodies dance under the full moon.
The scent of love permeates the air,
hearts beating faster at lover’s kisses being share.
A gentle kiss, yet in its quest demanding.
Kindred souls forever joined as one,
intensifying passions on a journey begun.
Sensual promises of loves everlasting bliss,
sensual promises sealed with a kiss.
A contest entry
- Acrostic Poetry [Prewrites Allowed] by Manda Kathryn.
600 points, ended January 15, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent...
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sealed with a kiss...a good idea for a phrase to be used for this passionate acrostic ^^ and you described the kiss with sweet imagery
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Such tender love flowing so effortlessly down the page and seeping into my heart
.♥.
Thank you for your entry
Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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ONe quick suggestion: do away with the caps on the beginning of each line... makes it feel choppy Mere suggestion
I love that you took it a step further and made it into an acrostic!! Well done!!
Good luck!
Mel
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the changes have been made.
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Oh My!!
Love this
and in an Acrostic too
Wowwyyyyyyyy~~
Beautiful images to satiate the palette
gets one ready to pucker up and kiss
the heck out of You
Woooooooo Hooooooooooooo
Thank You for sharing Your Talent Sweet One!!
Best wishes to You in the challenge
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Such a very pretty Acrostic~
I am sure this will receive top merits for Imagery and Emotion ~
If you can make this Bear step up and want to be kissed, then you have done something brilliant ~
The best of luck to you and your entry,
Bear ~
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awwww its fun kissing bears
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This is gorgeous. I love the sensuality and the way you linked emotion to this piece. Wonderfully done. I felt like I was there all the time. Beautiful poet, keep on penning.
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thank you for your words here.
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Sealed with a Kiss
Ok-You're now Queen of the acrostics! A terrific write-
Your sense of rhyme improves with every attempt. One question with the word "regimes". Not only does one feel kissed, but looking forward to the "promises"-
KISS!
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now you have the question after befuddling my mind in pm???????? ok ok now i am off to bed. thank you RLM Sir for your comment and will ask for your question tomorrow or when i see you next.
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Clever acrostic very well rhymed and nicely executed thoughout.
I find acrostics very hard and to rhyme one well like this is very impressive. Not to mention I feel kissed.
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since i do consider you the king of rhyme on here, i am greatly honored by your compliment. usually i am not good at rhyming and when it is done it is mostly by accident. thank you for everything.
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Shimmer
This is a very well done and well written poem.
My suggestion though is this;
In the line......Savoring the touch of his lips against my,
I think that the word, mine, would work, fit and sound better than the word "my".
But that is it. Like I said just a thought.
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thanks for the advice, i made the change. i am always messing up those two along with a few others so appreciate it when told when i used the wrong one. i guess i skipped grammer class more than i thought.
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this is an amazing acrostic. the poem had me enraptured from beginning to end. the vivid descriptions paint a picture and invoke deep feeling in the reader. well written.
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thank you for your kind words. i am glad that this turned out ok as this form is still rather new to me. i appreciate you taking the time to comment and the applause.
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just a quick observation ... this is truly an excellent write, but considering as you wrote it in an acrostic I would suggest that you put it left align. I've always enjoyed acrostics (not like Ktulu ) but find that if they are centred it takes away from it ... just a suggestion mind you
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hey......I never said i don't like acrostics..lol I even wrote a few.
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done thank you for the advice. it does look better this way.
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