He took a walk through forest fair
Upon that fateful night,
Which left him bloodied and laid bare
'Neath starlights traitored sight.
He screamed her name, through shadowed gloom;
'Til paling moon had lost it's bloom.
He screamed her name!
He screamed her name!
Whilst dying in his woodland tomb.
She felt his cries of "Rosaline!"
Pierce through her panicked soul.
His heart, once pealing lovers chimes,
Now rang its waning toll.
"Awake my love!" She held her breath.
His body limp, eyes stared bereft.
"Awake my love!
Awake my love!"
But he was gone, soul claimed by Death.
She clung to him amidst the pine;
Curled by his naked frame.
She was in life with him entwined,
She'll never be the same
"I am no more!" She, on her knees,
Called out among the withered trees.
"I am no more!"
"I am no more!"
Forever echoes on the breeze.
Author notes
Trijan Refrain
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines.
Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas, although a variation of the form is not to repeat the same line
at the beginning of each stanza. In other words, the beginning line of each stanza can be different.
The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8.
The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:
Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d/d/c
Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4/4/8
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This was weird cause usually the poem flows right from the first line...but this time the poem came from the last 5 lines. It was so hard to write the rest from that! I hope you all like it!
Thankyou goes to John who changed my mind about killing off Rosaline.
A contest entry
- The endless contest (or longest contest is more like it)! by Ted E Bare.
450 points, ended April 30, 2008, 96 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Why don't you try a trijan refrain?
Comments
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...Wow...
Wow.
I love it.
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This is wonderful and flows like silk. This form can be so much fun and you use it to its full potential. Great work!
Love,
Amera♥
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I really enjoyed this one Darianna. If I can somehow find my poetic muse again I might give this form a try. And I agree this one sounds almost Shakespearean.
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wow
this is almost Shakespearean , to me anyhow, in tone. I could feel the Jane Austen stylings as well in this. I am not sure of the form but then again I don't follow forms when I write or read. I think I will give trijan refrain a try. That is after I can figure out what it is ..lol
shalom
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Oh My Word!!
This is one Beautiful piece Sweet One and Love the tale You have told also the form You have weaved
Magnificent!!
I was on the edge of my seat wanting to read more
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Wooooooooooo Hoooooooooooooooooooo
Love it!!
Best wishes to You in all You do Beautiful
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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*Blushes* Thankyou Desire. Your comment really touched me!
UGH, I so love you!!!! HUGS!!!!
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You write such beautiful things.
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Thankyou!! You're so sweet
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Wonderful!
Wow, Mo, this is fantastic. I love the form and I love what you've done with it even more. You have that knack with this kind of write and subject. Great job! I may have to try one of these myself.
Love it and you,
Dad
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