A flower dying:
The fading scent
and wilting leaves of color
point out the simple power
of life
A grandmother dying:
The fading color in her cheeks
and the smell of the hospital
becoming overpowering.
All this points out that
life is fragile
A pet dying:
The last flicker of life in its eyes
and the single breath before the end.
It tears me apart
and shows me that life
is precious
Maybe the end is just
a continuation of the life
that starts at
piano and then crescendoes like
the glorious sunrise
and sunset
then fades
let the moon rise with our memories
A contest entry
- The End of..... by Anna Emkah.
600 points, ended December 4, 2007, 19 entries
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kinda morbid, huh? well i hope it answers the prompt =)
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that starts at
piano and then crescendoes like
the glorious sunrise
and sunset
then fades
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You painted such a tragic yet vivid picture with your words and effort into this poem. Immense in detail and deep thought. Wonderfully penned.
Thanks for entering. Good luck.
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This i think is great...excellent..not morbid at all i think..maybe change the skulls to flowers....I think understanding death is a great part of life.....great write
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This is very nice. No not morbid at all. In this poem you show that all life is ending... a flower points out the simple power of life, a grandmother (or any person for that matter) shows that life is fragile and a pet dying shows that life is precious, for you do not want to lose the dying pet (the fauna, nor the flora and the people). I love the last line. They are really a climax in this poem...
Maybe the end is just
a continuation of the life
that starts at
piano and then crescendoes like
the glorious sunrise
and sunset
then fades
let the moon rise with our memories
These lines are just splendid. Very well done.
Anna.
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Wow... first off, LOVE how you incorporated the title into the last line of the poem. It starts out with a story, then ends with the lessen that things start, but sooner or later they'll end. Life is very fragile; never take it for granted. (And I know you don't.) Great job.
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Simply beautiful! I hope that you do well
with this one in this contest! It was a
pleasure to read and I wish you the best
of luck with it here!
Jeremy0826
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