Suppose the world is but a dream
And we, the thoughts of other beings
And when they plan
And fight
And scheme
We cry
We laugh
We hope
We scream
Then all the things
That might have been
Are just the wraiths of other themes.
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This reminds me of the Matrix. We are someone elses imaginative, or dream, or puppet. It's an eerie concept indeed. But who knows, it could be right.
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I suppose this is pretty good. I personally didn't care for starting 4 lines in a row with the word and but still a good write. thanks for entering and good luck.
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And I, in the mirror,
see myself
dreaming.
Am I dreaming
that I see myself
in the mirror?
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I have heard this idea before but I really like the way you express it, especially the rhymes.
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wow that was really intriguing.. i look at this and automatically say to myself [its too short] but then i read it and i am sucked it. it seems so simple and yet its so deep and you have such a way with your words... i am amazed how something i thought would be so simple [just another entry] ended up really making me think. wow.. good job! really, thanks so much for entering this and good luck!
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wonderful write here, it flows so nicely. Its quick and very good
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this was very interesting. Thanks for your entry.
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Interesting...are we cloned...
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It's an interesting theory and you've given me goosebumps. It's like the parallel universes theory but you have written in a more poetic way, not sci fi
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ok...i feelin this line of reasoning. its an interesting what if. what's most interestin is that in a way, the supposition is true for lots of people. we often live according to standards created in other people's minds. some of us actually live, fight, scheme, cry, laugh, hope and scream while shackled to someone else's dreams...often the dreams of the dead. i like how you put this together. excellent
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I really love the thought and contrast in this.
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A very interesting write that allows your readers to become lost in thought of these themes that make up our lives both past and present...
Very well said...
Peace and many blessings
~A~
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I would hate to be only the thoughts of other beings..I am sure a lot of the way the world is though, is from the way we think, so, in a way, this has so much truth, this poem gives the reader much to philosophize about
thank you so much for your recent comment on my poem,
Morning's Song, yes, the characters are strong, I suppose because they are somewhat real
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