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Silver Tear

As silver tear rolls down his face
His heart buried in a forgotten place

A wounded warrior
My beaten prince

A silver tear rolls down his face and in the tear a reflection:
A haunting past that stabs and bruises

A silver tear turns red
The Blood of a Savior
A drop of blood rolls down his face and in the blood a reflection:
A pure, risen warrior, the heart of a man

A drop of gold falls from his face and in the gold a reflection:
A man bringing a generation to their feet, teaching them to stand for their Savior

A silver tear once fell from his face
His heart was once buried in a forgotten place
My warrior
My risen prince

 

For Eurice

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  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    February 3, 2008

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    This is lovely, I like the revolving about the tear alot and its transition. I'm not crazy on each line staring with "A", to me it stands out a bit. Overall, I did enjoy this piece though and think it has a solid and lovely theme.


  • leander Moderators member
    January 6, 2008

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    There is a lot of tenderness and beauty in this poem, and as I mentioned that before, I like that
    I think there's a little oopsie in the very first line - looking at the rest of the poem and the repetition, I think it should be 'a silver tear' there
    Thank you for this entry as well!
    Leander

  • kales4
    January 5, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my contest! I loved how you used colours to represent certain feeling or emotion. This gived much insight to the character. Good Luck!


  • Tarja
    December 21, 2007

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    Congrats on the bronze. This was truly an emotional piece. You captured all the heartache of a man's tears and you did it so beautifully with much vivid, colorful detail. Thank you for entering and well done.

  • Lady Mak
    December 14, 2007

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    What a beautiful poem

    Such a beautifully written poem so full of heart touching emotions it carreses your heart and soul beautifully written , Wow this is great I've read it twice and I'm going back to read it again. Bravo. Bravo. Bravo.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    December 10, 2007
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    A fine piece of poetry this is!
    Thank you for sharing and for being a part of the contest


  • FransB gold member
    December 8, 2007
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    A beautiful poem with a wonderous message. Congrats on your award - you deserve it. FransB


  • Daizy21
    November 28, 2007

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    I agree, this is a work of art, you have spoken of true passion, and that is a rare gift.
    thank you for this, well done, Good luck!


  • In Too Deep1
    November 23, 2007

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    This is an original and unique writ. I loved the style and flow that you have used. This is a really touching work of art, that I was delighted to have read. Thanks for sharing and very best wishes in the comp


  • LadyDementia gold member
    November 23, 2007
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    Wowzer!!!

    A wonderful write. So full of love, heart wrenching to read. Best of luck in the contest!


  • loveisfreedom
    November 22, 2007
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    Amazing

    that was so beautiful I loved immensely it made me cry… good work keep it up


    • Xx Luna xX
      November 22, 2007
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      wow

      Thak you... I'm really glad you like my poetry...

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