A song was sung, a dirge composed of weeps, of cries
That rhymes with the raindrops falling from her eyes,
It's lyrics unsaid explicitly calls a foul
The violence done against a female soul.
The painting ain't abstract for untutored eyes can see
That blue, violet and green don't match a canvass pale;
But containment in a frame curtails reality
As Da Vinci's Mona Lisa cannot be a tell-all tale.
In a far and exhausted corner another song was played
Its tune was silence, and its lyrics were gasps and breaths;
A mind that's full and a heart that's crushed bare laid
Swaying in the rhythm of vengeance and regrets.
He said she was a nagger living in distrust and lies
She easily cooks wrong impressions just like instant pizza pies;
For times he was late for dinner, her kisses were flying cups
And for friends he closed his house as her mouth just wouldn't stop.
But he loved her well and dearly, and lived with her for years,
His angst he kept within him the overflows are turned to tears;
He claims her love has turned a poison that rusts the bond and veil
And her care became an acid that destroyed what he used to feel
Two songs, two bodies, two soul
That many says they should be a whole;
But now they lie, divided into parts
Accusing each other as the cause of the spark.
A contest entry
- Domestic Violence, Self-Injury & loss of control :) by Miss Miranda.
450 points, ended November 29, 2007, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How do you like the poem?
Comments
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A well-deserved Gold!
And how masterfully the scenario unfolded ...
You certainly slashed to the core of domestic violence. If only we could see ourselves in the many mirrors help up to us.
Well done.
Love
Myra
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This was amazing written to perfection. I loved the way you described this so eloquent but clear and understandable at the same time!! Thank you for sharing!
Lauren
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Wow! This is awesomely written!You deserved the gold on this! For once I am speechless! Incredible write and Congrats!!!!
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thanks a lot for your support!
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Fantastically written poem, I particularly enjoyed the use of words and the way you viewed the entire scene from outside.This poem envokes plenty of emotion and demands the readers attention, great work.
Good luck in the contest, although I dont think you need it.
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you did a great job writing this piece, good luck in the contest.
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Well written
thanks for sharing this with us.
ephiphany
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powerful
A very well written poem on how marriages fall apart and the aftermath.I also like some of your play of words. Nicely written.Keep it up. -
Wow. Wow. You did such a fantastic job portraying the decay of a marriage and the violence that ensues.
Wow.
Best of luck in the contest!
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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Thanks. I need that virtual pat on the shoulder
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What a write; so emotional and sad.
Powerfully penned
Best of luck to you in the contest
Stay safe
~Amanda
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Thanks, Amanda. That's encouraging.
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well done, vivid images and feelings were strong through out...very sad, makes one think. My Fav part was the last part, and the title is great, I just had to read it after seeing it take care ~Michelle
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Thanks dear. Take care too.
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