Take it-
just take it already and go.
no more games, please
I beg you batter my heart-
and bludgeon my breast-
toy not with wizardry of words:
To love, to lie, it's all the same.
Your heart-it seems- i've failed to tame
It's lost
it's lost
it's lost
it's gone.
Vanished. Vanquished.
Over & Done.
And it all apart.
falls
Author notes
Boy...am I ever in love with the wrong person.
A contest entry
- Enter All Your Love Writes Here! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended March 8, 2008, 306 entries
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I hope you find the right person. Thanks for the entry.
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thanks, I know I've found my right person, I just don't think I'm his right person
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I like the slight amount of dirty pretty in here with the ending line. It suits the poem well. And speaking of endings: WOW. My favorite part is "It's lost / it's lost / it's lost." You've emphasized the main crux of the poem, and it is splendid. Then, the beginning when you beg to your heart to be battered and scorn... Like you've given up on love entirely. So sad with raw intensity. Love it.
Thanks for entering your write in "Enter All Your Love Writes Here!", and good luck!
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Did like the creative use of space, works well for this poem. Also the falls placement - enjoyed the sentiments expressed so well in these lines -
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My judgement is....
the format of this is what made it very interesting...and the words were well spoken and appropriate. Thank you so much for your entry. And have a great holiday...I wish you luck in the contest.
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