Pull all the curtains and ravage my pride
Tie me in chains so I'll stay by your side
Everyone must feel ardor
So why can't I have something more?
A celestial heaven with access denied
As far from the Lord as this world is wide
Improvise your little plot
Chastise me and watch me rot
Your full-afflicted tyranny
Is overly-infecting me
Why can't you just let us be?
Why can't you just set us free?
You can't hear through your ears
You can't see from your eyes
The full-flying motion of our own demise
Your poison's where my body lies
You'll try and kill it, hope it dies
Well I've got news for you just now
I'll break free and show you how
One day I'm running out the door
And you won't hold me anymore
'Cause your full-afflicted tyranny
Is overly-infecting me
And I could never let this be
I must see light, I must be free
Author notes
November 21, 2007.... My parents are prejudice about me and my girlfriend being gay... so they made so many rules as to where we aren't even allowed to touch each other... they are always trying to talk me out of the relationship, but it's just not going to happen so this poem is a big "fuck you" to them.
A contest entry
- Life by RudeGirlxSkaKid.
600 points, ended December 27, 2007, 37 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I've Been Smudged........ by FlipperSwitch.
600 points, ended January 16, 2008, 15 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is so emotionally charged! Honest and open display of your feelings and thoughts! Thank you for sharing and best to you in the life you live...be proud of who you are...I am!
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I know a friend of mine is in the same position- very well written. I can feel the anger but it's a bit dampened with disappointment and at the same time the strength you both have to keep going is beautiful. Thank you for entering.
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Sorry for the delay in judging; and thank you for taking the time to enter. I wish you the best of luck in the contest!
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great rhyming, loved it, a moving poem!thanks for entering and good luck!
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I like all of this except the third line. The accent’s wrong or something.
“more” has a lot rhymes.
suggestions: :
You rip my soul to it’s bleeding core
When you say I can have nothing more.
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You have your love, why can’t I have mine
Who meets my needs as we combine?
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You love who you want, why won’t you let me?
Who are you to say who my love must be?
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I’m not saying you will win if you change it. Let me know if you do change it so I may look at it again.
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That's wrong how your parents won't accept you for who you are. I don't think it really matters if someone is gay. As long as you find the right person and love that person then nothing else should matter. I totally understand why you're feeling angry with your parents. Good job expressing the way you feel in this poem.
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