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[ around his head ]

around his head
a halo of light
blowing out the candles

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Happy Birthday, Lyndon.

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  • Lyndon gold member
    November 26, 2007

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    I am thrilled that a rabbit could do this

    but you have, little Pip.
    Thank you sincerely for your Japanese form and I like it!
    Lots of love


  • Anna Emkah
    November 22, 2007

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    Very nice tribute to Lyndon (Ron). Indeed Ron deserves a halo and in combination with the birthday cake... Magnificent.
    However, I wonder... have the rules for writing a good Haiku changed? I have learned that the second line of a Haiku has to be the longest... and that a Haiku never should be longer than 17 syllables. The last option is ok... 15 syllabels, but in this form... 4-5-6? Can anybody tell me how the rules are nowadays?
    Thanks in advance. Anna.

    PS. I got the answer... a modern Haiku can be written in this way too! I learn every day!


  • Pollycheck
    November 21, 2007

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    This is a great birthday haiku. No one ever wrote a birthday haiku for me Just kidding. Great haiku again.