Thick summer nights
long gone
with colours that wither
away in the fall
Naked branches sway
to and fro
like an unfinished masterpiece
etched in soft strokes
Skies of ember reveal
sunsets warm hue
affecting the very
depths of your soul
Reflections of solitary
days gone by
winds shifting natures
aria as waltzing clouds
drift awry
Seasons final descent shed
in endless new growth
weaves an unknown trail
along it's distant
windswept journey
Author notes
W O R K I N G H A R L E Y L A D Y
wanted to write something to reflect the beautiful
fall landscape here in minnesota
A contest entry
- A tribute to Fall... by MyCutsDontBleed.
545 points, ended November 5, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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very nice in describing fall ... good take.. wonderful
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This is very nice, love the metaphors..imagery is striking.
Line one, I think you could omit 'endless'...but if you
keep it a comma after thick wouldn't hurt.
L-5...edit out 'that'...just an extra word.
I like the 'ember' skies, very sensual..it adds a layer
of "afterglow" ... much better than the overused 'amber'
In stanza 3, I think the fourth line should include
'aria'...it would change the visual footprint, but...I think it's
worth the sacrifice. It should be 'nature's'...and I love the waltzing clouds.
The last stanza is perfection, I think it could stand alone as a short piece.
Send me a ticket and put on the coffee, lol
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Neat!
What a journey in itself to grasp every aspect that you portrayed in this work... I just love the ambition that you express in all that you write... very open minded you are as a person...
~ James ~
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This swept my senses away. I could see every color and hue. Soft poetry filled with vivid imagery and energy - love this, you have a gift!
Wolfie
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Beautifully phrased. You have crafted a delicate piece here. Nicely penned indeed.
Thanks for entering.
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Painting such a beautiful scene of your home...The beauty is well penned and makes me want to come visit for a while
Blessings
~Cheryl~
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Excellent write!!
You did just that my dear!! A beautiful poem about this place you tell of! Carries your reader along with you on that Harley to see what you see!! See it all before winter hits!! Excellent job of expression in this poem! Don
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This is lovely, but I don't think it fits the contest prompt. Thanks for entering.
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