to watch life from far away
with only vision
as if you had no touch
even if you had perfect sight
to examine every minute detail
it would never be enough
to replace not being allowed
to touch..
A contest entry
- Picture Prompt Quickie by JeannieD Hunter.
900 points, ended November 22, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Oh my this is so wonderful. Sad yet beautiful! Sounds like a distance relationship. Well done. Thanks for entering and good luck!
Jeannie -
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I am struck by your insight.
honest it was subconcious that that made it in there as well.Good eye i am exreriancing a distant relationship,allthough I know so much about her she is not here to touch...thank you for pulling that out.
In ink,
David
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you did paint alot of images inside my mind
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I found the 15 line limit
very useful as a guide line.
Images in your mind...(smiles and chuckles)...
I look forward to reading some of your poems.Raggy Ann.
Agent of Purgatory,
Dabbler
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look a little closer
i cant help but get the feeling when i read this, that you write it as if though you were experienceing an outer body experience. it gives me a sense of awareness. it really good -
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You are observant ,and aware
burn victems also loss a lot of touch sensation after recieving skin grafts and that is sad as well.I have had OBE and suffer pit mal seizuzers.
A real good picture she picked out.
I look forward to her next contest idea.
David
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