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The Birds: A Quatern

The birds were soaring in the sky
As the large wooden cart went by
The dirt was displaced from the road
As the big ugly eagle crowed.

The day was calm, spirits were high
The birds were soaring in the sky
The farm was peaceful as can be
As blue jays chirped a melody.

But then there came sudden unrest
As the cow was shot in the chest
The birds were soaring in the sky
They dispersed, shrieked a mournful cry.


The war had arrived at long last
Just as they sat down for breakfast
They knew it would not end until
The birds were soaring in the sky.

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  • debilynn gold member
    March 20, 2008
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    this is a group contest and i do not see your name on the list of members. therefore, you are being disqualified.


  • Misery into Melody
    December 2, 2007

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    I like this, nice imagery, good rhyming scheme. Very, i dunno how to say it, but its very.
    Good luck in the contest.


  • Dancing the Rumba
    November 22, 2007

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    WOW! FULL OF IMAGERY! AWESOME! No I'm not using caps lock, I TRULY LOVE THIS!
    Vivien
    Part of your contest holders group

  • Gott ist tot
    November 22, 2007

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    I like the cyclical nature of this. I think the birds could stand for people. Good luck. 'Cow' should be 'crow'