there are no voices
to express their pain
in a world without choices
there are no voices
lives lived on the edges
humanity tied in chain
there are no voices
to express their pain
Author notes
I was inspired by PK's Poem
http://allpoetry.com/poem/3617488
http://www.channel4.com/news/articles/society/health/serbias+secret+shame/1054047
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Well done. Your words express such despair. Anyone being oppressed, mistreated really don't have voices,and those that can speak for them usually don't, thanx, conni
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Beautifully written. An excellent triolet and a poem full of stong meaning.
A joy to read.
John
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Lord Have Mercy!
Oh Mari... I can easily see how PK's poem touched your heart and inspired this writ. What an atrocity we witness by reading these few perfectly chosen words. They express the reality of maltreatment and a world with what seems to be little compassion. An excellent response to what Pete wrote. How sad!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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EXCELLENT
With 14,000+ Comments, I would say your poem here does not apply fo you! But you are at the outer edge of communication on All Poetry. Fine poem.
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One need not speak hun to be heard for with action they can do that. It is indeed unfortunate that many do indeed feel they have no choice and hence no voice, but by the very act of remaining where they currently are, they are expressing their voice. I don't meant this comment as a criticisms of the write for I know you did it just to bring the matter to light where an exchange can take place such as this and hence they too can regain their
voice...one which was never really lost but only forgotten...
Hugs...Eddy
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Loved it
This line has so much of helplessness in it,'in a world without choices there are no voices'-'lives lived on the edges humanity tied in chain'-this leaves you questioning yourself/the so called society we live in, about the role we play in the universal game of living-'lives lived on the edges'-yes ,but does humanity have to be tied in chains?are we not suppose to do something about it?should we not be their voices?
Mari, a very well written poem that has so much to offer-I maybe interpretting it and wanting to read it so differently from what you intended
but I personally think exvcellent poetry leaves the poem open to n number of interpretations depending on the reader's take-I have really enjoyed this poem a great bunch Muchais gracias 
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Triolet... dang, how long it's been since I ever tried my hands on these - in fact, any form really... very well done sweety!
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this is wonderful, a lovely form; and the message is powerful and clear. Thank you so much for taking time to write on this important subject...PK
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Who is PK? Don't make me go click.
Isn't it wonderful that those least able to object are always those who most need to do so? If you can't fight back in this world, your life isn't worth much. Sorry, I'm spouting Vintinner stuff today, lol.
Your poem reminds me of how the mentally ill used to be treated in "civilized" countries, shameless part of history, like so many other parts.
Where there's no money, there's no reason to be compassionate I suppose. Sad.
Some good thoughts here like "on the edges" and "humanity tied in chains." You're a smart, fair minded critter.
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